Writing task 2 – Can someone help to mark and score my essay? I will be having my exam quite soon, so please do help to check. Thanks :)

QuestionsCategory: Writing Task 2Writing task 2 – Can someone help to mark and score my essay? I will be having my exam quite soon, so please do help to check. Thanks :)
Greg asked 1 year ago

WRITING TASK 2
Some people believe that it is good to share out as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.
 
          Some social members convince that sharing all the information regarding to scientific research and academic paper, and also business and marketing strategy would bring benefits, while the others contend that some information should be kept due to its utmost importance and value, and thus such data cannot be given out through mass media. This essay will elicit about both argument and give a conclude viewpoint.
            The supporters tend to claim that sharing the new scientific discoveries, new marketing tips and new ideologies will act as a springboard in enhancing the society’s general knowledge. It is undeniable that such knowledge will lead to a positive motivational development among the public as some people will make such well-known intellectualists as their role models. For example, the ideologies that had been said by Jack Ma (the current China’s billionaire), tend to inspire a lot of people including me. Besides, it would be more efficient if the scientists across the globe communicate and exchange with each other with new precise and accurate data. Time and money can be saved as the chances of repetition of jobs is avoided so that the other scientists can concentrate another new area upon new discoveries.
            However, there is always an opposite. Some of them do not want to share the information publicly due to copyright issues. People are not surprised to see that nowadays there are many unauthorised irresponsible frauds stealing other people’s information to publish on the Internet. The most frustrated part is, the frauds claim that these data belong to them and sell them in low price. Furthermore, some political information is too sensitive and secretive and thus it should not be published anywhere. Also, some scientific research about improving the design of weapons should not be publicised as such a valuable information may be vulnerable if the protesters such as ‘IS’ receive it and made thousands of modernised weapons to have another ‘THIRD WARS’.
            In conclusion, weather to publicise the information or not is about the type of information. Sharing educational, inspirational information is a must but several laws need to be implemented in order to deal with copyright issues to protect the original publisher, while sharing those secretive informations are a no.

Writing task 2 – Can someone help to mark and score my essay? I will be having my exam quite soon, so please do help to check. Thanks 🙂
4 (80%) 1 vote

Greg replied 1 year ago

Anyone? really urgent as i will be having my test few days ltr.

1 Answers
Rachel Evans answered 1 year ago

          Some social members convince that sharing all the information regarding to scientific research and academic paper, and also business and marketing strategy would bring benefits, while the others contend that some information should be kept due to its utmost importance and value, and thus such data cannot be given out through mass media. This essay will elicit about (WC) both arguments and give a conclude viewpoint.
The supporters tend to claim that sharing the new scientific discoveries, new marketing tips and new ideologies will act as a springboard in enhancing the society’s general knowledge. (repetitive of  ‘new’ – using it once is fine) It is undeniable that such knowledge will lead to a positive motivational development among the public as some people will make such well-known intellectualists as their role models. For example, the ideologies that had been said by Jack Ma (the current China’s billionaire), tend to inspire a lot of people including me. Besides, it would be more efficient if the scientists across the globe communicate and exchange with each other with new precise and accurate data. Time and money can be saved as the chances of repetition of jobs is are avoided, so that the other scientists can concentrate another new area upon new discoveries.
However, there is always an opposite. Some of them do not want to share the information publicly due to copyright issues. People are not surprised to see that nowadays there are many unauthorised irresponsible frauds stealing other people’s information to publish on the Internet. The most frustrated part is, the frauds claim that these data belong to them and sell them in low price. Furthermore, some political information is are too sensitive and secretive and thus it should not be published anywhere. Also, some scientific research about improving the design of weapons should not be publicised as such a valuable information may be vulnerable if the protesters such as ‘IS’ receive (WC + tense) it and made thousands of modernised weapons to have another ‘THIRD WARS’.
In conclusion, weather whether to publicise the information or not is about/ (depends on) the type of information. Sharing educational, inspirational information is a must but several laws need to be implemented in order to deal with copyright issues to protect the original publisher, while sharing those secretive pieces of informations are  is a no.
Overall 7.0
This is a well written essay, however, you should pay more attention to word use and form.

Writing task 2 – Can someone help to mark and score my essay? I will be having my exam quite soon, so please do help to check. Thanks 🙂
4 (80%) 1 vote

Greg replied 1 year ago

Anyone? really urgent as i will be having my test few days ltr.

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