Tourists and historical sites. Could you please check my essay and give your opinion?

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Anastasia asked 3 years ago

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?
Nowadays a lot of city’s sites/attractions are full of tourists, but not of local people. They are not attracted to these places. In this essay I am going to sort out (clarify) some of the issues arising from this fact and propose some solutions.
On the one hand, it is great that in the age of modern technologies museums and historical sights are still popular. However, they maintain their popularity due to touristic streams, being pretty much ignored by the local inhabitants. The first problem as I see it is that for local people exploring their city is the last priority. Being permanent residents, they are not motivated to go sightseeing. Besides, they tend to put off excursions until later date focusing on their everyday routine. In contrast, tourists usually have limited time, so they try to see as many historical sites as they can. Another reason is that when at school pupils are informed about the local attractions in a quite a boring and unattractive way. They are taken on field trips in groups often feeling uncomfortable, tired, not excited enough. There is too much obligation and monotony and too little play and interactivity in such trips, which later build heavy memories. This is not the experience they would most like to repeat as they grow up.
In terms of solutions, I think creative and non-traditional advertising of exhibitions, museums and art galleries in social media and in local newspapers will intrigue (inspire) adults to know more about art or history. In addition, lower entrance fees for local citizens or even free sightseeing trips organized by schools and universities in an interesting way to motivate youngsters to learn more about their native town or city.
To sum up, local people have different reasons not to explore their city. However, some measures pointed out above can be taken and popularity of historical places can be easily enhanced among local citizens.

1 Answers
Nam Phuong answered 3 years ago

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?
Nowadays a lot of city’s sites/attractions are full of tourists, but not of local people. They are not attracted to these places. In this essay I am going to sort out (clarify) some of the issues arising from this fact and propose some solutions.
On the one hand, it is great that in the age of modern technologies museums and historical sights are still popular. However, they maintain their popularity due to touristic streams, being pretty much ignored by the local inhabitants. The first problem as I see it is that for local people exploring their city is the last priority. Being permanent residents, they are not motivated to go sightseeing. Besides, they tend to put off excursions until later date focusing (to focus) on their everyday routine. In contrast, tourists usually have limited time, so they try to see as many historical sites as they can. Another reason is that when at school pupils are informed about the local attractions in a quite a boring and unattractive way. They are taken on field trips in groups  often feeling (and often feel) uncomfortable, tired, not excited enough. There is too much obligation and monotony andtoo little play ( few activities) and interactivity in such trips, which later build heavy memories. This is not the experience they would most like to repeat as they grow up.
In terms of solutions, I think creative and non-traditional advertising of exhibitions, museums and art galleries in social media and in local newspapers will intrigue (inspire) adults to know more about (local) art or history. In addition, lower entrance fees for local citizens or even free sightseeing trips organized by schools and universities in an interesting way (is suggested) to motivate youngsters to learn more about their native town or city.
To sum up, local people have different reasons not to explore their city. However, some measures pointed out above can(should) be taken and (so that) popularity of historical places can be easily enhanced among local citizens.

T.R: 8.0

  • sufficiently address all parts of the task

C.C: 8.0

  • sequences information and ideas logically

L.R: 7.5

  • use sufficient range of vocabulary

G.A: 7.5

  • use variety of complex structure
  • minor grammatical errors

Overall: 8.0

  • good job!
  • Clear ideas
  • to boost score, you should try use more academic words and complex structures

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