The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.

QuestionsCategory: Line ChartThe graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.
elnuroruclu asked 12 months ago


    A glance at the line graph provided reveals the number of visitors on two new music websites (Music Choice and Pop Parade) during 15 days. It can be clearly seen that on most days music lovers prefer “Pop Parade”  website, with rare exceptions such as 12th and 13th days.
    According to the graph, during the first seven days “Pop Parade” showed a downward trend (from 120,000 to 40,000), but “Music Choice” visitor numbers fluctuated between 20,000 and 40.000. Between days 7 and 9, both figures followed the same trend, although “Pop Parade” had bigger numbers. Following two days, “Pop Parade” witnessed a sharp rise from 40,000 to 150,000, while “Music Choice” with a small increase was mostly uniform. The only days when “Pop Parade” had lower visitors comparing “Music Choice” was days 12 and 13, but it was followed by a dramatic climb and hit a peak (160,000) on the last day of the period. While “Music Choice” trend was fluctuated and finished around 70,000.  

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.
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elnuroruclu replied 12 months ago

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1 Answers
Thuy Dung Pham answered 12 months ago

A glance at The following graph provided reveals the number of visitors on of two new music websites-Music Choice and Pop Parade during 15 days. In general, it can be clearly seen that on most days music lovers highly prefer “Pop Parade”  website, with rare exceptions on 12th and 13th days.
According to the graph, during the first seven days, the number of “Pop Parade” visitors showed a downward trend from 120,000 to 40,000 while that of “Music Choice” fluctuated between 20,000 and 40.000. Between days 7 and 9, both figures followed the same trend, although “Pop Parade” is more preferred had bigger numbers. The following two days witnessed “Pop Parade” sharply rose from 40,000 to 150,000, whereas “Music Choice” with a small slight increase was mostly uniform. The only days when “Pop Parade” only had lower visitors comparing with “Music Choice” was days 12 and 13, but yet it was followed by a dramatic climb and hit reach a the peak of 160,000 on the last day of the period. Meanwhile, “Music Choice” trend was fluctuated and finished at around 70,000.  
Feedback
Task achievement: 7.0 (clear ideas of comparison, key features are highlighted)
Coherence and cohesion: 7.5 (good flow, ideas are well-organized, very clear compare and contrast)
Lexical resource: 6.5 (non-academic vocabs are still used, errors of phrasal verbs and prepositions)
Grammar Range and Accuracy: 7.0 (maintain complex structure well)
Overall: 7.0 (Good job. Try to use more academic vocabs and phrasal verbs)

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. » You should write at least 150 words.
5 (100%) 1 vote

elnuroruclu replied 12 months ago

thank you for correction

elnuroruclu replied 12 months ago

thank you for correction

elnuroruclu replied 12 months ago

thank you for correction

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