The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

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roxanne asked 3 months ago

WRITING TASK 1
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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words. 

 
The bar charts give information about the options chosen by graduate and postgraduate students in the UK who were not working full-time after completing their degree in 2008.
 
Overall, it can be clearly seen that the figures for both types of degrees follow the same pattern. The majority of students, graduates or postgraduates, chose to attend supplementary courses, while the least number of students volunteered after obtaining their degree.
 
Attending supplementary studies and working part-time are the most desired career paths for students after gaining their degrees. The highest number of students chose further education in both segments (29,665 graduates and 2,725 postgraduates), followed by those who worked part-time (17,735 graduates and 2535 postgraduates).
 
In contrast, unpaid activities, such as volunteering or having no job, were the least popular. Only a small number of UK graduates and postgraduates chose to work as volunteers in the UK (3500, respectively 345), whereas 16,235 UK graduates compared with 1,625 UK postgraduates were jobless.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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1 Answers
Thuy Dung Pham answered 3 months ago

The bar charts give information about the options chosen by graduate and postgraduate students in the UK who were not working full-time after completing their degree in 2008.
 
Overall, it can be clearly seen that the figures for both types of degrees follow the same pattern. The majority of students, graduates or postgraduates, chose to attend supplementary courses, while the least number of students volunteered after obtaining their degree.
 
Attending supplementary studies and working part-time are the most desired career paths for students after gaining their degrees. The highest number of students chose further education in both segments (29,665 graduates and 2,725 postgraduates), followed by those who worked part-time (17,735 graduates and 2535 postgraduates) (the number should be roughly mentioned or mentioned directly with using “respectively”).
 
In contrast, unpaid activities, such as volunteering or having no job, were the least popular. Only a small number of UK graduates and postgraduates chose to work as volunteers in the UK (3500, respectively 345), whereas 16,235 UK graduates compared with 1,625 UK postgraduates were jobless.
 
Task achievement: 6.0 (addresses all parts of the task, presents an overview with information appropriately selected)
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0 (arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression)
Lexical Resource: 5.5 (uses only basic and limited range of vocabulary)
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 5.5 (uses a mix of simple and complex sentences but only a limited range of structures)
Overall: 5.5 (Overall, you understand the instruction but this task needs to be improved. It is too simple to get high score.)

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
5 (100%) 1 vote