Some poeple think that money spent on space exploration is a waste and could be better used to fund other urgent problems in society.

QuestionsCategory: OpinionSome poeple think that money spent on space exploration is a waste and could be better used to fund other urgent problems in society.
yellowlemonade asked 11 months ago

Some poeple think that money spent on space exploration is a waste and could be better used to fund other urgent problems in society.
 
 Most of societies think that governments should invest money in welfare services, while lambasting authorities which are pouring money on space-related matters as they perceive it as a waste.  To a certain extent, I agree with those who think that it is useless while there are more important problems, however, I also find space studies beneficial.
 
 Space studies are important in terms of understanding our life, accordingly, our future. First of all, human beings, in any case, have to annex other galaxies to meet its extreme needs in the future. I therefore believe that, a certain sum of a state’s money should be funnelled on space-related works. Secondly, space exploration does not mean that  money is completely poured on space vehicles. İn creating or designing process of a space vehicle, a great range of inventions, coincidently perhaps, are made. For example, nowadays what we are using for communication such as, cell-phones, computers, radios and even energetic matters have been basically explored in space studies, which therefore renders space industry vital.
 
 Nevertheless, I believe, governments should strike a balance between space-related works and welfare services. While a society is emanated by generally indigent people, investing an enormous amount of money on space would be absurd. For example, in a poor society, which people even do not have any suitable transportation line or cannot afford to buy its drugs, people generally would be more likely to focus on perpetuating their life, which therefore prohibits them to be oriented on science.  So from my point of view, unless urgent needs of public and its welfare service are not met effectively, trying to deal with space would be meaningless.
 
İn conclusion, I believe that space explorations are vitally important, having said that, I also think space expenses should be balanced with the economic situation of a country and same attention should be paid on welfare services as well.
 

Some poeple think that money spent on space exploration is a waste and could be better used to fund other urgent problems in society.
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Thuy Dung Pham answered 11 months ago

Most of societies think that governments should invest money in welfare services, while lambasting authorities which are pouring money on space-related matters as they perceive it as a waste.  To a certain extent, I agree with those who think that it is useless while there are more important problems, however, I also find space studies beneficial. (you should write in third person!)
 
 Space studies are important in terms of understanding our life, accordingly, our future. First of all, human beings, in any case, have to annex other galaxies to meet its extreme needs in the future. I, (comma) therefore, believe that,  (don’t need a comma here!) a certain sum of a state’s money should be funnelled on space-related works. Secondly, space exploration does not mean that money is completely poured on space vehicles. İn creating or designing process of a space vehicle, a great range of inventions, coincidently perhaps, are made. For example, nowadays what we are using for communication such as, cell-phones, computers, radios and even energetic matters have been basically explored in space studies, which therefore renders space industry vital.
 
 Nevertheless, I believe, governments should strike a balance between space-related works and welfare services. While a society is emanated by generally indigent people, investing an enormous amount of money on space would be absurd. For example, in a poor society, which where people even do not have any suitable transportation line or cannot afford to buy its drugs, people generally would be more likely to focus on perpetuating their life, which therefore. As a result, it prohibits them to be oriented on science.  So from my personal point of view, unless urgent needs of public and its welfare service are not met effectively, trying to deal with space would be meaningless.
 
İn conclusion, I believe that space explorations are vitally important, having said that, I also think space expenses should be balanced with the economic situation of a country and same attention should be paid on welfare services as well.
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