Some people think the main purpose of schools is to turn the children into good citizens and workers, rather than benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

QuestionsCategory: Writing Task 2Some people think the main purpose of schools is to turn the children into good citizens and workers, rather than benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Saodat95 asked 6 months ago

Some held the belief that the primary aim of schools is to furnish children who will become excellent members of society better than to profit them as inhabitants. I totally agree that schools produce the productive members of society since the government put compulsory subjects in school curriculum.
 Firstly, even though it would be more beneficial for youngsters to study from their interests, it is more pivotal to develop the nation by producing loyal children as some skills are trained through some compulsory subjects. So that the main purpose of schools is to take liability of generating well-behaved youth to the society. Although some children who do not participate in social relationships are able to influence the others, the initial goal of schools is to turn the young generation to be faithful people and workers. For the reason that children are formed tolerance and sharing to the community.
 Another point to consider is that ethics including a set of moral principles considered in conversation skills and dressing ability are not taught out of the school along with excellent personality. Hence such things are submitted as subjects in the school curriculum in order to develop social and optimistic personality. In other words, schools can produce leading cadres for the future in the improvement of the country comparing with profits as individuals. Consequently, the progressing of the country might increase if children are turned to good inhabitants and workers.
 To conclude, educating children with valuable features and personalities is the main priority rather than training them to be individualistic human beings.
 

Some people think the main purpose of schools is to turn the children into good citizens and workers, rather than benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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1 Answers
Nam Phuong answered 5 months ago

Some held the belief that the primary aim of schools is to furnish children who will become excellent members of society better than to profit (benefit/ make advantage to) them as inhabitants. I totally agree that schools produce the productive members of society since the government put compulsory subjects in school curriculum.
Firstly, even though it would be more beneficial for youngsters to study from their interests, it is more pivotal to develop the nation by producing loyal children (==>future citizens) as some skills are trained through some compulsory subjects. So that (==>Therefore,) the main purpose of schools is to take liability of generating well-behaved youth (youngsters) to (for) the society. Although some children who do not participate in social relationships are able to influence the others, the initial goal of schools is to turn the young generation to be faithful people and workers. For the reason that (so that) children are formed tolerance  (tolerant) and sharing to the community.
Another point to consider is that ethics including a set of moral principles considered in conversation (communication) skills and dressing ability are not taught out of the school along with excellent personality (???). Hence such things are submitted as subjects in the school curriculum in order to develop social and optimistic (desirable) personality. In other words, schools can produce leading cadres for the future in (in the aim of)  the improvement of the country comparing with profits (benefits/ advantages) as individuals. Consequently, the progressing (prosperity) of the country might increase if children are turned to good inhabitants and workers.
To conclude, educating children with valuable features and personalities is the main priority (in schools) rather than ( training them to be (==>instead of being) individualistic human beings.

L.R: 6.0

  • address all parts of the task quite good

C.C: 5.5

  • main points are organized quite logically but ideas are not clear enough

L.R: 6.0

  • should be more careful when using vocabulary. Some words such as profits, youth… is used inaccurately

G.A: 6.0

  • use a mix of simple and complex structure

Overall: 6.0

The way you develop your idea is good, but you should try more to make it clearer and more persuasive!

 

Some people think the main purpose of schools is to turn the children into good citizens and workers, rather than benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
1 (20%) 1 vote

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