Rachel Evans if you have free time please check my essay

QuestionsRachel Evans if you have free time please check my essay
Khurshidbek asked 1 year ago

Space exploration us too much expensive and the money should be spent on more important things.What is your opinion?

Investigating space has constantly been provocative for researchers,especially for astronomers.To some,exploring it is extremely pricey and expenditures ought to be spent to other much more crucial things,such as :declining the poverty ,environmental destructions and improving the technology.It is agreed that these issues have greater role in relation to that for the former in our modern life.The further paragraphs will provide the number of reasons which can corroborate the abovementioned point of view.

There can be some perspectives that under seeking areas beyond the Earth planet is worth to the astronomical spendings .This can be because aliens whose lifestyles are almost identical with human beings’ might be found and their area can be an optimal place to survive when the Earth comes about uninhabitable.However, the problems which are mentioned above are currently essential since they are germaned to mankinds’ lives.

In some parts of the world majority of people are suffering from variety of illnesses and dying woing to lack of food as well as water resources.Moreover,environmental concerns like air and water pollution exist in almost all areas.In order to save more and more individuals lives and deacrease the rate of pollutions investing the most share of the money which are spending to expedite the space would be much more sensible action.

What is more,hi-tech plays an integral role in this world.The more sum of money humans invest to the development of those form of technologies,the better chances they will have to make their lifestyles convinent.This is to the fact that money together with time could be saved by using the new gadgets.Givent time,they may make the exploration of space less challenging and relatively inexpensive.

Although ,there are some views that a huge amount of money should be spent to the investigation of space ,commuting them to decrease the destituteness,environmental difficulties and to improve the cutting edged technologies would be beneficial for humankind’s.

Rachel Evans if you have free time please check my essay
5 (100%) 1 vote

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

Thank you a lot for checking,but I think you should learn to understand the mistakes which were made during the typing process,some grammatical structures,words .And I believe that you underestimated my essay.You can put these kind of low marks for students who have commenced learning to write essay about a month ago.Keep this in your mind.Anyway thank you !!!

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

By the way “dear” have you ever taken an IELTS exam?if yes what was your writing and overall band score

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

By the way “dear” have you ever taken an IELTS exam?if yes what was your writing and overall band score?

Rachel Evans replied 1 year ago

Hi, Khushidbek,
Thanks for your comments. I'll keep that in mind. I know that we have typos all the time, but as you post your essay here or elsewhere for assessment, it should be considered as the one you submit on your real exam. So strict on those is just a reminder.
About your essay, even the easiest examiner cannot give you a 7, my friend. 5.5 may be too strict, thou, I admit 😀 And one more thing you should know, I'm NOT qualified as an examiner, so all the bandscores I put here are <strong>estimated ones</strong>. They are from what I've been taught and my own experiences.
And fyi, i took IELTS test 2 years ago, and my overall was 8. And I am still working on my skills to improve my bandscore. 🙂

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

But you should admit that this score is incorrect and I think you know that,easiest examiner 😂,even ielts instructors who have 20-25years experience cannot predict exactly,how you are predicting this,or do you have any other unusual ability😂?

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

*the easier examiner,*do u hv any unusual ability😂?

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

Also I hope you have sent the last message in which you mentioned our the last result honestly

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

Omg I have problem with my keyboard,*also I hope u hv mentioned your the last result honestly

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

Rachel could you please check my another essay.Here it is

Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximize chances of employment.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Ever-growing tuition fees at higher education establishments coupled with the shortage of jobs available after graduation had some individuals question the practicality of arts degrees. Therefore, it is claimed that there should be only applied subjects that increase the graduates’ employability. The following essay will discuss this statement further and indicate my viewpoint at the end.

In today’s hectic world, every job opportunity breeds a ruthless competition among jobseekers. With more and more employment now being based in industries such as manufacturing and services, odds of securing a position in these workplaces are stacked against history or philosophy students. An arts graduate would not be successful as opposed to a business-related course student. However, if they pursue a career in politics for example, they may end up in a powerful position in the future given their hard work.
On the other hand, the significance of arts field cannot be undermined due to the lack of career prospects. It is still essential for our generations to keep up the ancient traditions and follow their passion if they choose to study these programs. On top of that, everyone has the freedom of choice which means they can go for any course according to their preferences and live up to the requirements and expectations of the modern employment market.

To summarize, some people believe higher priority must be placed on university degrees with more practical value rather than abstract ones to grab employment opportunities. Nevertheless, I disagree with this view and consider arts degrees as important as others

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

Thank you in advance

Rachel Evans replied 1 year ago

After discussing with other admins, we all agreed that you should get a 6 for the essay.

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

For which one?

1 Answers
Rachel Evans answered 1 year ago

Investigating space has constantly been provocative for researchers, especially for astronomers. To some, exploring it is extremely pricey and the expenditures ought to be spent to on other much more crucial things, such as: declining the poverty, environmental destructions (addressing problems such as poverty, environmental destruction) and improving the technology. [It is agreed that these issues have greater role in relation to that for the former in our modern life.] (unclear and no so connected to the other sentences) The further paragraphs (interesting word, I’ve never heard of) will provide the number of (word choice) reasons which can corroborate the abovementioned point of view. (Your introduction is not really a bright one as it is not clear and a bit lengthy. Short and simple is the best approach)
There can be some perspectives that under seeking areas beyond the Earth planet is worth to the astronomical spendings. This can be because aliens whose lifestyles are almost identical with human beings’ might be found and their area can be an optimal place to survive when the Earth comes about uninhabitable. However, the problems which are mentioned above are currently essential since they are germaned (?!) to mankind’s lives.
In some parts of the world, majority of people are suffering from variety of illnesses and dying woing (?!) to lack of food as well as water resources. Moreover, environmental concerns like air and water pollution exist in almost all areas. [In order to save more and more individuals lives and deacrease (typo) decrease the rate of pollutions, investing the most share of the money which are spending to expedite the space would be much more sensible action.] (GR error)
What is more, hi-tech plays an integral role in this world. The more sum of money humans invest to the development of those form of technologies, the better chances they will have to make their lifestyles convinent (typo) convenient. This is to the fact that money together with time could be saved by using the new gadgets. Given time, they may make the exploration of space less challenging and relatively inexpensive.
Although, there are some views that a huge amount of money should be spent to the investigation of space, commuting them to decrease the destituteness, environmental difficulties and to improve the cutting-edge technologies would be beneficial for humankind’s.
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To some extend you’ve addressed the TQuestion, but overall, the structure and coherence of the essay are not very good. Sentence structures may be repetitive and limited.
Punctuation saves lives, buddy. Pay attention to your use of punctuation ^^
Overall 5.5
TA – 5.5 CC – 5.0 LR – 6.0 GRA – 5.5

Rachel Evans if you have free time please check my essay
5 (100%) 1 vote

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

Thank you a lot for checking,but I think you should learn to understand the mistakes which were made during the typing process,some grammatical structures,words .And I believe that you underestimated my essay.You can put these kind of low marks for students who have commenced learning to write essay about a month ago.Keep this in your mind.Anyway thank you !!!

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

By the way “dear” have you ever taken an IELTS exam?if yes what was your writing and overall band score

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

By the way “dear” have you ever taken an IELTS exam?if yes what was your writing and overall band score?

Rachel Evans replied 1 year ago

Hi, Khushidbek,
Thanks for your comments. I'll keep that in mind. I know that we have typos all the time, but as you post your essay here or elsewhere for assessment, it should be considered as the one you submit on your real exam. So strict on those is just a reminder.
About your essay, even the easiest examiner cannot give you a 7, my friend. 5.5 may be too strict, thou, I admit 😀 And one more thing you should know, I'm NOT qualified as an examiner, so all the bandscores I put here are <strong>estimated ones</strong>. They are from what I've been taught and my own experiences.
And fyi, i took IELTS test 2 years ago, and my overall was 8. And I am still working on my skills to improve my bandscore. 🙂

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

But you should admit that this score is incorrect and I think you know that,easiest examiner 😂,even ielts instructors who have 20-25years experience cannot predict exactly,how you are predicting this,or do you have any other unusual ability😂?

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

*the easier examiner,*do u hv any unusual ability😂?

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

Also I hope you have sent the last message in which you mentioned our the last result honestly

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

Omg I have problem with my keyboard,*also I hope u hv mentioned your the last result honestly

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

Rachel could you please check my another essay.Here it is

Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximize chances of employment.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Ever-growing tuition fees at higher education establishments coupled with the shortage of jobs available after graduation had some individuals question the practicality of arts degrees. Therefore, it is claimed that there should be only applied subjects that increase the graduates’ employability. The following essay will discuss this statement further and indicate my viewpoint at the end.

In today’s hectic world, every job opportunity breeds a ruthless competition among jobseekers. With more and more employment now being based in industries such as manufacturing and services, odds of securing a position in these workplaces are stacked against history or philosophy students. An arts graduate would not be successful as opposed to a business-related course student. However, if they pursue a career in politics for example, they may end up in a powerful position in the future given their hard work.
On the other hand, the significance of arts field cannot be undermined due to the lack of career prospects. It is still essential for our generations to keep up the ancient traditions and follow their passion if they choose to study these programs. On top of that, everyone has the freedom of choice which means they can go for any course according to their preferences and live up to the requirements and expectations of the modern employment market.

To summarize, some people believe higher priority must be placed on university degrees with more practical value rather than abstract ones to grab employment opportunities. Nevertheless, I disagree with this view and consider arts degrees as important as others

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

Thank you in advance

Rachel Evans replied 1 year ago

After discussing with other admins, we all agreed that you should get a 6 for the essay.

Khurshidbek replied 1 year ago

For which one?

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