Rachel Evans, I would like your help in assessment

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Given is a bar graph that illustrates changes in the level of births and deaths with future projections, provided by UN statistics, in Switzerland over 50 years between 1970 and 2020.

Overall, it is observed that until 1990, the rates were almost similar. However, the difference between the levels has more than doubled since then and it is predicted that by 2020 there will be 3 times more births than deaths among the population.

A glance at the details reveals that both birth and death rates stood at around 1 million in 1980. However, in the next decade more deaths were recorded compared to births. Since then, the levels have grown in opposite directions. To illustrate this, compared to 1million deaths in 2000, natality was more than 2 times higher (almost three million). The following decade saw a decline in the number of deaths among the population, while births reached as high as 3 million. It is predicted that this trend will continue with the level of the former peaking at more than 3 million, whereas the latter will fall to around 800,000.

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great replied 2 months ago

Thank you very much. I will follow your advice to improve my writing 🙂

Rachel Evans replied 2 months ago

You’re welcome. You can do better, I know it. Keep working 🙂

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Rachel Evans answered 2 months ago


Given is a bar graph that illustrates changes in the level of births and deaths with future projections, provided by UN statistics, in Switzerland over 50 years between 1970 and 2020.
Overall, it is observed that until 1990, the rates were almost similar. However, the difference between the levels has more than doubled since then and it is predicted that by 2020 there will be 3 times more births than deaths among the population.
I’d like it better if you provide trend of both natality and mortality in this paragraph. This overview has yet clearly generalize the main features of the chart
A glance at the details reveals that both birth and death rates stood at around 1 million in 1980. However, in the next decade more deaths were recorded compared to births. Since then, the levels have grown in opposite directions. To illustrate this, compared to 1million deaths in 2000, natality was more than 2 times higher (almost three million). The following decade saw a decline in the number of deaths among the population, while births reached as high as 3 million. It is predicted that this trend will continue with the level of the former peaking at more than 3 million, whereas the latter will fall to around 800,000.

Overall 6.5-
good vocab and structures
should interpret the data clearer ~

Rachel Evans, I would like your help in assessment
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great replied 2 months ago

Thank you very much. I will follow your advice to improve my writing 🙂

Rachel Evans replied 2 months ago

You’re welcome. You can do better, I know it. Keep working 🙂

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