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Thien_bui asked 4 months ago

The pie charts below units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
Summarise the informaion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
 
The pie charts below display the comparison of electricity proportion produced by five different energy resources in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
As can be seen from the pie charts, in 1980, about half of electricity production (100 units in total) used Coal source in Australia, doubling the amount of electricity using the same source in France.
By contrast, the Oil source created 20 units of electricity in France, twice  the quantity of electricity production of Australia in 1980, and continued to increase by 5 units in 2000.
It is evident that two-fifth of total production were split equally between Gas and Hydro Power sections in 1980, but just taking a tiny minority of amount of electric the next 20 years in Australia.
As regard to the charts, Nuclear Power was as a popular energy among the majority of all sources in France, with massive 126 units in 2000, whereas this source was unavailable in Australia from 1980 to 2000.
Overall, although the sum of electricity production of Australia was 10 units more than France in 1980, these positions were totally switched in 2000, with 180 units and 170 units perspectively.

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Rachel Evans answered 2 months ago

The pie charts below display the comparison of electricity proportion produced by five different energy resources in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

As can be seen from the pie charts, in 1980, about half of electricity production (100 units in total) used Coal source in Australia, doubling the amount of electricity using the same source in France.

By contrast, the Oil source created 20 units of electricity in France, as twice as the quantity of electricity production of Australia in 1980, and continued to increase by 5 units in 2000.

It is evident that two-fifth of total production were split equally between Gas and Hydro Power sections in 1980, but just taking a tiny minority of amount of electric the next 20 years in Australia.

As regard to the charts, Nuclear Power was as a popular energy among the majority of all sources in France, with massive 126 units in 2000, whereas this source was unavailable in Australia from 1980 to 2000.

Overall, although the sum of electricity production of Australia was 10 units more than France in 1980, these positions were totally switched in 2000, with 180 units and 170 units perspectively.

Overall ~ 6.

The overview should be placed right after the introduction so that it can give readers a big picture of what were describled on the charts.

DO not capitalize randomly, even the source name.

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