Please evaluate my writing task_2. Thanks in advance.

QuestionsCategory: Writing Task 2Please evaluate my writing task_2. Thanks in advance.
livermore asked 3 years ago

Topic: Do you agree with Capital Punishment?
Before discuss this theme, people should comprehend meaning of this word. Namely, capital punishment is death penalty that nowadays enforced by multitude of countries to restrict serious crime due to effectiveness. Undeniable, these days crime rate is surpassing in any countries of globe, thus their government have to penalize with death punishment some categories of felons who commit worst crime such as murdering innocent individuals like a children. Indeed, this measure is prudent idea in this case owing to the following reasons.
In actual fact, death penalty is incompatible to contemporary culture since tolerance and respect to others lives are sacred sense for human beings. On the one hand, if individuals carry on to remain this status quo, they may lose security in society because without death sentence, delinquents never fear ordinary punishment and they do crime continuously on daily basis. Consequently, it entails majority of awful situation. One salient example, last year one group offenders brutally raped a women in the underground of London. Due to that, high court punished with death penalty to that group. Since that case, such kind of situations did not occur and crime rate considerably decrease in the UK. It is irrefutable fact that death penalty gives message that you won’t be given any second chance if you commit crime like killing someone without any reasons. Thus, this message is strongly needed for some society to rein crime rate.Therefore, capital punishment is vitally important to decline the crime ratio and at the same time provide secured life.
By way of conclusion, from my point of view, murderers and other criminals suffer more in jail. In this circumstance, death sentence is suitable way to out.

livermore replied 3 years ago

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livermore replied 3 years ago

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1 Answers
Nam Phuong answered 3 years ago

Topic: Do you agree with Capital Punishment?
Before discuss (discussing) this theme, people should comprehend meaning of this word. Namely, capital punishment is death penalty that nowadays ( are being) enforced by multitude of countries to restrict serious crime due to effectiveness. Undeniable (Undeniably), these days crime rate is surpassing( increasing dramatically) in any(many)  countries of (on the) globe, thus their government have to penalize with death punishment (in) some categories of felons (for those) who commit worst crime such as murdering innocent individuals like a children. Indeed, this measure is prudent idea in this case owing to the following reasons.
In actual fact, death penalty is incompatible to (with) contemporary (modern) culture since tolerance and respect to others lives are sacred sense for human beings. On the one hand, if individuals carry on to remain (remaining) this status quo, they may lose security in society because without death sentence, delinquents never fear ordinary punishment and they do (make/ conduct) crime continuously on daily basis. Consequently, it entails majority of awful situation. One salient example, last year one group offenders brutally raped a women in the underground of London. Due to that, high (premier) court punished with death penalty to that group. Since that case, such kind of situations did not occur and crime rate considerably decrease in the UK. It is irrefutable fact that death penalty gives message that you won’t be given any second chance if you commit crime like killing someone without any reasons. Thus, this message is strongly needed for some society to rein crime rate.Therefore, capital punishment is vitally important to decline the crime ratio and at the same time provide secured life.
By way of conclusion, from my point of view, murderers and other criminals suffer more in jail. In this circumstance, death sentence is suitable way to out.

L.R: 7.0

  • address all parts of the task

C.C: 7.0

  • logically arrange ideas and information

L.R: 7.5

  • use wide range of vocabulary

G.A: 7.0

  • use variety of complex structure

Overall: 7.0

You should practice more about brainstorming and developing ideas to make your point of view clearer.

livermore replied 3 years ago

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livermore replied 3 years ago

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