Please ciritic my Task 2 answer. Your help will bring good Karma to you. Thank you in advance.

QuestionsCategory: Two-Part QuestionPlease ciritic my Task 2 answer. Your help will bring good Karma to you. Thank you in advance.
novem_abellana asked 3 years ago

People spend large amounts of time and money on clothes, hairstyles and make up to change their appearance.

Is it important for people to be concerned about the way they look?

What are the consequences of focussing on physical appearance?

Hours and a big amount of money are spent by people in fashion, hairstyles and vanity to modify their looks. This essay will first discuss how critical for people worry their image and the repercussion of concentrating on their physical appearance.

It is definitely important for people to matter their self-images. This is because their look is the basis on how they want to be treated with respect by others. For instance, a recent survey by Pulse Asia concluded that 79% of the presentable and well-groomed waiters of McDonald’s, a busy and crowded fast-food restaurant, were respected and not scolded by irate customers. Instead, they faced the complainant in a calm demeanour.

With regards to the trend of focusing on people on their physical image, there might be two possible ramifications of this phenomena. The first consequence is they perhaps think that they have this thinking of superiority than others. They believe that with an advantage of looks, they think that a huge importance than others must be given to them. Last and not the least, they pride that looks are equivalent to special treatment. As an example, a report by the mental health department of Thailand showed that 40% of surgically-enhanced Thais showed arrogance with their beauty and physique, and they demanded to be exempted in queuing to access other public services.

In conclusion, a good image can gain respect, however, if right attitude does not come along, like being narcissistic and arrogant, it would negate on how they would be treated by others.

novem_abellana replied 3 years ago

Thank you so much Madam Rachel ^_^

1 Answers
Rachel Evans answered 3 years ago

Hours and a big amount of money are spent by people in fashion, hairstyles and vanity to modify their looks. This essay will first discuss how critical for people worry about their image and the repercussion of concentrating on their physical appearance.
It is definitely important for people to matter their self-images. This is because their look is the basis on how they want to be treated with respect by others. For instance, a recent survey by Pulse Asia concluded that 79% of the presentable and well-groomed waiters of McDonald’s, a busy and crowded fast-food restaurant, were respected and not scolded by irate customers. Instead, they faced the complainant in a calm demeanour.
With regards to the trend of focusing on people on their physical image, there might be two possible ramifications of this phenomena (phenomenon). The first consequence is they perhaps think that they have this thinking of superiority than others. They believe that with an advantage of looks, they think that a huge importance than others must be given to them. Last and not the least, they pride that looks are equivalent to special treatment. As an example, a report by the mental health department of Thailand showed that 40% of surgically-enhanced Thais showed arrogance with their beauty and physique, and they demanded to be exempted in queuing to access other public services.
In conclusion, a good image can gain respect, however, if right attitude does not come along, like being narcissistic and arrogant, it would negate on how they would be treated by others.
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Hi, novem_abellana Here is your estimated score:
TA – 6.0 CC – 6.0 LR – 6.0 GRA 6.0
Overall 6.0-

  • repetition and simple structures and vocab (even attempt to use less common lexi)
  • weak ideas and reasoning

novem_abellana replied 3 years ago

Thank you so much Madam Rachel ^_^

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