Please check my essay, point out any mistake and give suggestions and tell how it can be more effective to get more bands.

QuestionsCategory: OpinionPlease check my essay, point out any mistake and give suggestions and tell how it can be more effective to get more bands.
Antonia asked 5 months ago

Many countries spend too much money on training of a few individuals for international sports competitions. Some people think that governments should invest more in ordinary people instead. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples.

In the profession of sports, athletes trained themselves to an extent to compete with others to show thier best and out-number thier opponent in terms of physical tendency .to go to that level athletes needs support in terms of psyhcologically ,financially and they need good coaching as well.it is agreed that an athelete must be supported by the government in all three aspect mentioned above ,which is fullfiled by funding.this essay will look to the areas in which that the point is important that investment of government should have more on atheletes.

Human body is designed in a way that when every part of it works in a synchronized manner than it performs with full accuracy an aftermath of that synchronization separates one human from others in physical ability  .to assure that everything must work well ,than the athelete must have a sound mind which comes under the psychological  training .We can see this in the world of boxing and especially in mma (mixed martial arts) a dominant one build himself psychological strong and develop confidence on what he is for trained.so hiring psychologist for a sports individual augments the funding .

Nutrition is kind of a thing which is very much vital need for a human body ,but when it comes to doing some extra, which is in the case of athletes the needs of thier body plays important role in field of performing ,but nowdays there are so much processed foods for us to consume which do not fills the needs for performance . Supplements are very mucch common thing among sports people ,but not all people who belong to this profession can afford those high cost supplements . thereby ,in modern sports training supplements are the most essential things which is costy but affective too.

In conclusion , to obtain better result and to hope that your players should perform well in sports competitions it is important to that government should spend more on the training of athelete to out-class others in the line of physical match.

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Antonia answered 5 months ago

In the profession of professional sports, athletes trained train themselves to an extent to which compete with others to for show thier showing their best and outnumbering their their opponent in terms of physical tendency. This means that to going to that level athletes needs to support in terms of psychologically psychology, financially and they needing good coaching as well. It is agreed that an athelete athlete must be supported by the government in all three aspect mentioned above, which is full-filed by funding. This essay will look to the areas in which that the point which is so important that to investment of government should have more on athlete atheletes.

Human body is designed in a way that when every part of it works in a synchronized manner more than it performs with full accuracy so the aftermath result would be that synchronization separates one human from others in physical ability. To assure that everything must work better well, than the athelete athlete must have a sound mind which comes under pressure in the psychological training. We can see this in the world of boxing and especially in mma mixed martial arts, a dominant one builds himself psychological strong and develops confidence on what he is for trained for so .This means that hiring psychologist for a sports individual which augments the funding.

Nutrition is a kind of a thing which is very much vital need for a human body, but when it comes to doing some extra, which is in the case of athletes, the needs of thier their body plays an important role in field of performing. but nowdays Nowadays, there are so much processed foods for us to consume, however it which do does not fills the needs for performance. Also, supplements are very mucch much common thing among sports sporty people, but not all people who belong to this profession can afford to those high cost supplements. Thereby, in modern sports training, supplements are the most essential things thing which is costly costy but effective affective too.

In conclusion, to obtain better result and to hope that your players should perform well in sports competitions it is important (to note) that government should spend more on the athlete training of athelete to outclass others in the line of physical match. By doing this, sport players can obtain better result and perform well in sports competitions.



My advice:

1. The word “aftermath” just use for some cases such as disaster or misfortune => kind of bad.

2. You have problems with linking words and some errors in grammar.

3. Please capitalize the first letter of every word in a sentence.

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