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Nhựt Tân asked 1 year ago

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing and pollution problems.
To What extent do you agree or disagree?
What the measures do you think might be effective?
It is important for the central government to consider how to tackle environmental issues and traffic congestions. Many people hold onto the view for these pressing problems is that skyrocketing the petrol price which is the best solution. In my view, although this policy can reap advantages, the dwellers may tolerate some demerits. So, in this essay, I will propose a sensible solution in the current situation.
It is not coincidental that growing petrol fees with the view to solving environment and vehicles problems which can be seen as the most common concern of the whole society. Firstly, giving the rise to an increase in the petrol price not only is synonymous with bringing an enormous tax for the central government but also serve to reduce the broad range of vehicles on the street because the residents need to pay a remarkable measure of money. As a result, a huge amount of emissions pouring into the air decline steeply. In other words, air pollution being amongst the most outrageous factors harming directly to human’s health decrease considerably.
On the other hand, it is worth noting that government should prioritise the benefits of the residents over the others. If the petrol price increase, a measure of money have been paid by residents monthly grows moderately, resulting in the quality of life decline tediously.
From my personal point of view, in lieu of growing the petrol price, the central government should invest more in the public transportations and encourage the dwellers to use them. The convenient, comfortable and fast buses, for instance, may end up being an enticing vehicle for them to go or travel, not their private transportations. As a result, there will be fewer vehicles on the street and at the same time, the number of emissions will plummet.
All things considered, I believe that this policy may be a little useful, but it has curtailed some drawbacks at all.

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Rachel Evans answered 1 year ago

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing and pollution problems.
To What extent do you agree or disagree? What the measures do you think might be effective?
It is important for the central government to consider how to tackle environmental issues and traffic congestions. Many people hold onto the view for these pressing problems is that skyrocketing the petrol price which is the best solution. (confusing  due to way of writing) In my view, although this policy can reap advantages, the dwellers may tolerate some demerits. So, in this essay, I will propose a sensible solution in the current situation.
It is not coincidental that growing petrol fees with the view to solving environment and vehicles problems which can be seen as the most common concern of the whole society. Firstly, giving the rise to an increase in the petrol price not only is synonymous with bringing an enormous tax for the central government but also serve to reduce the broad range of vehicles on the street because the residents need to pay a remarkable measure of money. As a result, a huge amount of emissions pouring into the air declines steeply. In other words, air pollution being amongst the most outrageous factors harming directly to human’s health decreases considerably.
On the other hand, it is worth noting that government should prioritise the benefits of the residents over the others. If the petrol price increase, a measure of money have been paid by residents monthly grows moderately, resulting in the quality of life decline tediously.
From my personal point of view, in lieu of growing the petrol price, the central government should invest more in the public transportations and encourage the dwellers to use them. The convenient, comfortable and fast buses, for instance, may end up being an enticing vehicle for them to go or travel, not their private transportations. As a result, there will be fewer vehicles on the street and at the same time, the number of emissions will plummet.
All things considered, I believe that this policy may be a little useful, but it has curtailed some drawbacks at all.
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Overall 6.0 (TA 6.0 CC 5.5 GRA 6 LR 6)
At places, the way you express your ideas is confusing and hard to understand.
Should pay attention to SV agreement

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