please assess my writing ASAP! Thanks in advance.

QuestionsCategory: Writing Task 2please assess my writing ASAP! Thanks in advance.
Malak Usama asked 4 months ago

Question: Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Highways assess people in traveling to distant destinations in a short interval of time. However, there are some issues associated with it making it very dangerous and risky. In such situation, immediate solutions is a must.
First of all, highways often include trucks that put the lives of small automobile drivers in danger. Highway drivers including truck drivers frequently use rapid speed this may result in an undesired hassle in traffic which may cause accidents. Most motorway accidents today are caused by truck drivers who are speeding or unaware of neighboring conventional cars. For this instance, trucks must have their own drive that separates them from the rest of the cars.
Another reason why highways are of significant threat is its wide size. The roads are too big for drivers making it easy for unintended mistakes to occur. For example, a driver might exceed the speed limit unconsciously how free of obstacles and traffic the road is resulting in severe accidents like losing control over the breaks. For this reason, Highways should be reconstructed and made less widespread.
Finally, trucks should not be allowed on the same road as the rest of automobiles. Also , boulevards should be made smaller to protect civilians from unconscious mistakes. Freeways are extremely threatening. Therefore, precautions should be taken in advance.

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Thuy Dung Pham answered 3 months ago

Highways assess people in traveling to distant destinations in a short interval of time. However, there are some issues associated with it making it very dangerous and risky. In such situation, immediate solutions is a must.
First of all, highways often include trucks that put the lives of small automobile drivers in danger. Highway drivers including truck drivers frequently use rapid speed this may result in an undesired hassle in traffic which may cause accidents. Most motorway accidents today are caused by truck drivers who are speeding or unaware of neighboring conventional cars. For this instance, trucks must have their own drive that separates them from the rest of the cars.
Another reason why highways are of significant threat is its wide size. The roads are too big for drivers making it easy for unintended mistakes to occur. For example, a driver might exceed the speed limit unconsciously how free of obstacles and traffic the road is resulting in severe accidents like losing control over the breaks. For this reason, Highways should be reconstructed and made less widespread.
Finally, trucks should not be allowed on the same road as the rest of automobiles. Also , boulevards should be made smaller to protect civilians from unconscious mistakes. Freeways are extremely threatening. Therefore, precautions should be taken in advance.
Task achievement: 5.5 (presents some main ideas but the development is not always clear and not sufficiently developed)
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0 (presents information with some organisation but there may be a lack of overall progression, give examples that are not really persuadable and do not support strongly for the ideas)
Lexical Resource: 5.5 (uses a limited range of vocabulary for the task)
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 5.0 (uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, makes some minor errors in grammar, still have run-on sentences)
Overall: 5.5 (good ideas but you need to improve your writing skills by practicing more, separate ideas in paragraph probably, try to write more logical and precise)
 

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