Please assess my line graph practice with "the number of UK commuters". Thanks a lot.

QuestionsPlease assess my line graph practice with "the number of UK commuters". Thanks a lot.
trinhquochieu1501 asked 2 years ago

 

The line graph illustrates how many UK people used three different types of means of transport on a daily basis over a period of 60 years.
It is clear that the number of those using car and train increased significantly between 1970 and 2030, whereas the same period saw a gradual decrease in the figure for train. Additionally, the most popular mode of transport is car.
In the year 1970, the number of car and train users stood at roughly 6 million and approximately 3 million respectively. Over the following 4 decades, there was a substantial increase in the number of those going to work by car to nearly 7 million. Likewise, the figure for train also increased marginally, exceeding the figure for bus and reaching almost 4 million until 2015. By 2030, the figures for car and train are projected to grow, with the number of car users climbing to peak at 9 million.
By contrast, there were nearly 4 million peopke in the UK using bus at the beginning, which is higher than that of train, but this number dipped gradually to about 3.5 million during the subsequent 4 decades, a decrease of nearly 0.5. By 2030, there is expected to a steady fall to exactly 3 million.

Please assess my line graph practice with "the number of UK commuters". Thanks a lot.
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bee answered 1 year ago

The line graph illustrates how many UK people used three different types of means of transport on a daily basis over a period of 60  47 years ( Never forget to add this: with the projections for the future!!!)   . It is clear that the number of those using car,which  has been the most popular mean of transport,  and train Will be  increased significantly between 1970 and 2030, whereas the period same saw a gradual decrease in the figure for train is estimated to be seen ( at the end of the period ). Additionally, the most popular mode of transport is car.
( Use break lines !!!) In the year 1970, the number of car and train users stood at roughly 6 million and approximately 3 million respectively. Over the following 4 decades, there was a substantial increase in the number  ( In order to escape same words , try to use synonims ….here you may say : increase in the quantity of those going  ( went )to work by car to nearly 7 million. Likewise, the figure for train also increased( same word!!!) marginally, exceeding the figure for bus and reaching almost 4 million until 2015. By 2030, the figures for car and train are projected to grow, with the number of car users climbing to peak at 9 million. By contrast, there were nearly 4 million peopke in the UK using bus at the beginning, which is higher than that of train, but this number dipped gradually to about 3.5 million during the subsequent 4 decades, a decrease of nearly 0.5. By 2030, there is expected to a steady fall to exactly 3 million.
 
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Please assess my line graph practice with "the number of UK commuters". Thanks a lot.
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