My exam will be on March 18. Please evaluate and score my writing. Thanks in advance.

QuestionsCategory: Writing Task 2My exam will be on March 18. Please evaluate and score my writing. Thanks in advance.
Emelyn Nanquil asked 4 years ago

The costs of medical health care are increasing all the time. Governments are finding it difficult to balance the health care budget. Should citizens be totally responsible for their own health costs and take out private health insurance, or is it better to have a comprehensive health care system which provides free health services for all?
Discuss your viewpoint on this issue.

Health is a continuous major issue in every state, however, the costs of which has always been significantly climbing up endlessly and crippling the nation. This has brought governments in a predicament in managing funds for health care. It is my firm belief that it would be too ambitious for the country to solely carry the burden of the people’s medical expenses, thus, citizens should also share some of the responsibilities for their own health costs.
Firstly, governments have other sectors to prioritize like education, military and economic investments. These are of an equal footing to health in terms of prioritization for states to prosper and provide people a well-developed nation as a whole. In a poverty-stricken country like Vietnam or Peru, it is exorbitant to implement a comprehensive health care system where there are other divisions at the top of the budget expenditure.
Secondly, if governments were too lenient in providing all health care services, citizens would slack off in regards with their health. Access to medications and health assistance might be abused as well. Take for example, Saudi Arabia where medical expenses of locals are all without charge. An upward trend of morbidity rate was observed with manageable medical conditions such as diabetes and vehicular accidents because the Arabs knew that their government would pay all monetary charges.
Lastly, every individual is accountable for his own health; thus, it is unreasonable for the state to carry the entire burden. Laws and policies should be implemented regarding the categories and limitation of health assistance in such a way that people would not be abusive of their health as well as the nation’s resources. The Philippine health care system ensures that such guidelines are implemented and being accessed by those who are in need of medical support.
In all, it all boils down to the point that both government and people share an equal responsibility in the health care system. The citizens are accountable to maintain a healthy lifestyle and the government should be readily accessible for any medical help.

1 Answers
Nam Phuong answered 4 years ago

Health is a continuous major issue in every state, however, the costs of which has always been significantly climbing up endlessly and crippling the nation. This has brought governments in a predicament in managing funds for health care. It is my firm belief that it would be too ambitious for the country to solely carry (==> advanced vocab: shoulder one’s burden) the burden of the people’s medical expenses, thus, citizens should also share some of the responsibilities for their own health costs.
Firstly, governments have other sectors to prioritize like education, military and economic investments. These are of an equal footing (==> importance) to health (==>healthcare) in terms of prioritization for states to prosper and provide people a well-developed nation as a whole. In a poverty-stricken country like Vietnam or Peru, it is exorbitant to implement a comprehensive health care system where there are other divisions at the top of the budget expenditure.
Secondly, if governments were too lenient in providing all health care services, citizens would slack off in regards with their health. Access to medications and health assistance might be abused as well. Take for example, Saudi Arabia where medical expenses of locals are all without charge. An upward trend of morbidity rate was observed with manageable medical conditions such as diabetes and vehicular accidents because the Arabs knew that their government would pay all monetary charges.
Lastly, every individual is accountable for his own health; thus, it is unreasonable for the state to carry the entire burden. Laws and policies should be implemented regarding the categories and limitation of health assistance in such a way that people would not be abusive of their health as well as the nation’s resources. The Philippine health care system ensures that such guidelines are implemented and being accessed by those who are in need of medical support.
In all, it all boils down to the point that both government and people share an equal responsibility in the health care system. The citizens are accountable to maintain a healthy lifestyle and the government should be readily accessible for any medical help.

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