In some countries, children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries, they are allowed to almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

QuestionsIn some countries, children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries, they are allowed to almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?
nguyenlykimngan asked 3 years ago

In some nations, it is true that youngsters are limited in behavioral issues, while the others have rights to express their feelings. I believe that children should be encouraged to share their thoughts with other people.
On the one hand, strict rules might prevent children from developing and the growth of the community. Firstly, many people force their children to follow rules, so they do not have variety of choice and it could restrict their brain power. As an illustration, children are scared to bring out ideas in class or a group, because they believe that their thoughts would not be approved so they would not be confident in front of the crowds. Secondly, being embarrassed and awkward could be formed if people did not supported their thoughts, so they would give up on the ladder of career. 
On the other hand, I believe that allowing youngsters to express their feelings can promote their development. Although they are at a very young age, they have their own opinions and can contribute to the community about social issues. For example, if they take part in a competition about the environment, they can share their thoughts and these ideas might be effective in protecting the Earth. Permitting them to discuss and have a variety of choice would help them to find out strong and weak points in order to fix these mistakes. Besides, being confident can also be gained if they talk about their own solutions and dreams.
In conclusion, youngsters should be encouraged to express their ideas and not be restricted in behavior so they could promote their roles in the society.

1 Answers
Nam Phuong answered 3 years ago

In some nations, it is true that youngsters are limited in behavioral issues, while the others have rights to express their feelings. I believe that children should be encouraged to share their thoughts with other people.
On the one hand, strict rules might prevent (==> affect badly) children from developing (=> children’s development) and the growth of the community. Firstly, many people force their children to follow rules, so they do not have variety of choice (==> certain amount of choice) and it could restrict their brain power. As an illustration, children are scared to bring out (present) ideas in class or a group, because they believe that their thoughts would not be approved (appreciated) so they would not be confident in front of the crowds. Secondly, being embarrassed and awkward could be formed if people did not supported (don’t support) their thoughts, so they would give up on the ladder of career.
On the other hand, I believe that allowing youngsters to express their feelings can promote their development. Although they are at a very young age, they have their own opinions and can contribute to the community about social issues (in their own way, and it may possibly effective somehow). For example, if they take part in a competition about the environment (on environment conservation), they can share their thoughts and these ideas might be effective in protecting the Earth. Permitting them to discuss and have a variety of choice would help them to find out (their) strong and weak points in order to fix these mistakes. Besides, being confident can also be gained if they talk about their own solutions and dreams.
In conclusion, youngsters should be encouraged to express their ideas and not be restricted in behavior so they could promote their roles in the society.

T.R: 6.5

  • address all parts of the task
  • 1st main point is more fully covered.

C.C: 6.5

  • arrange information and ideas coherently.

L.R: 6.0

  • lack of academic vocabulary
  • some words are not appropriate

G.A: 6.0

  • use a mix of simple and complex structure

You should develop main points and supported ideas better so your opinion will be more persuasive.

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