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livermore asked 2 years ago

Some think that children should start school as early as possible, while others believe that they should start school at the age of seven.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion
The issue early education of children has become widespread in recent times, with various opinions being expressed with regard to it. Some people claim that children should start school as early as possible while others argue that good and suitable age to begin school is 7. Personally I definitely agree with the former statement and this essay will provide aguments to support both view.
Ceratinly, on of the major reasons is that most children have a chance to learn elementary education early. The main evidence to support the above point is current researchers determaine that 5 and 6 year old pupils are able to count numbers, memorise some little poems. For instance, my brother began study at the age of 6, although he could count numbers until 100 in English and native language, besides he being smarter than other pupils who start study at the age of 7. Another crucial reason is children share own opinions with classmates. I mean that this way enriches their imagination.
However, certain parents are afraid to send own children to school in this period. Main reason is some children`s knowledge is not enough to standard of school. In particular, they run into a lot of difficultes and problems thoughout first year of school.
Briefly, if your children really want to begin education at the age of 6, do not worry, cause the main aspect is not the age in this situation. To my way of thinking, everything depends in your help. Namely, parents must always support own children to do homework as a result their willingly help can improve children`s study. 

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livermore replied 2 years ago

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parvinder1985 replied 2 years ago

Some people prefer to live in the same place most of their life, but others like to live in different places. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

When a person becomes an independent adult, he has to make many important decisions,choosing a place to live is amongst one of them.While some people prefer to spend their entire lives in the same city, others choose to explore different places in different parts of the world.This essay puts forward pros and cons of both viewpoints.

Many people choose to live at the same place where they were born,mostly because for them emotions and sense of attachment to the homeland are of paramount importance.They are well-versed with the locality and people around them which provide them the sense of security, also living with ones makes it possible for them to help them in need.In other words, they can take care of their old parents if they live close by.In addition to this, such people often turn out to be successful leaders and are well-respected as they spend their whole life in the same locality.It is no surprise that people tend to trust a local leader whom they know well than any other random person during elections.

On the other hand, some people advocate the fact that traveling not only makes one wiser but also is better for their career.Many people who are unable to find good opportunities in their own city or town travel to another place for better and lucrative jobs.Consequently, they learn new skills or languages which in turn further increases their employability.Living and working in different places, with different people often change their outlook towards life and make them more open to other cultures and new ideas.Hence, it can be agreed that living in different places surely facilitates in better career prospects.

Consider both the sides, I believe both the sides have their own advantages.Residing at one place brings one closer to his family, friends and society whereas living at different places bring in more opportunities for employment and personal development.Indeed, it is matter of individual preference which varies from person to person.

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Thuy Dung Pham answered 2 years ago

The issue of early education of children has become widespread in recent times (recently), with various opinions being expressed with regard to it. Some people claim that children should start school as early as possible while others argue that good and suitable age to begin school is 7 (seven). Personally, (comma) I definitely agree with the former statement and this essay will provide arguments to support both view.
Certainly, on one of the major reasons is that most children have a chance to learn elementary education early. The main evidence to support the above point is current researchers have determined that 5 five and 6  six year-old pupils are able to count numbers, and (delete comma, add “and”) memorise some little simple poems. For instance, my brother began study studying at the age of 6 six, although even though he could count numbers until 100 in English and native language, . Besides, he being was smarter than other pupils who start study started studying at the age of 7  seven. Another crucial reason is children share their own opinions with their classmates. I mean that Therefore, this way enriches their imagination.
However, certain parents are afraid to send of sending their own children to school in this period. Main The main reason is that some children`s knowledge is not enough to standard (standard is a noun or an adjective, not a verb) of school. In particular, they run into a lot of difficulties and problems throughout the first year of school.
Briefly, if your children really want to begin their education at the age of 6 six, do not worry, cause (spoken English) it is not a serious matter because the main aspect is not the age in this situation. To my way of thinking, everything depends in on your help. Namely, parents must always support their own children to do homework. as As a result, (comma) their willingly help can improve their children`s study. 
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I have exam after several days, please check my essay(task2) thank you in advance..
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livermore replied 2 years ago

Kindly evaluate my essay , give me bandscore

parvinder1985 replied 2 years ago

Some people prefer to live in the same place most of their life, but others like to live in different places. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

When a person becomes an independent adult, he has to make many important decisions,choosing a place to live is amongst one of them.While some people prefer to spend their entire lives in the same city, others choose to explore different places in different parts of the world.This essay puts forward pros and cons of both viewpoints.

Many people choose to live at the same place where they were born,mostly because for them emotions and sense of attachment to the homeland are of paramount importance.They are well-versed with the locality and people around them which provide them the sense of security, also living with ones makes it possible for them to help them in need.In other words, they can take care of their old parents if they live close by.In addition to this, such people often turn out to be successful leaders and are well-respected as they spend their whole life in the same locality.It is no surprise that people tend to trust a local leader whom they know well than any other random person during elections.

On the other hand, some people advocate the fact that traveling not only makes one wiser but also is better for their career.Many people who are unable to find good opportunities in their own city or town travel to another place for better and lucrative jobs.Consequently, they learn new skills or languages which in turn further increases their employability.Living and working in different places, with different people often change their outlook towards life and make them more open to other cultures and new ideas.Hence, it can be agreed that living in different places surely facilitates in better career prospects.

Consider both the sides, I believe both the sides have their own advantages.Residing at one place brings one closer to his family, friends and society whereas living at different places bring in more opportunities for employment and personal development.Indeed, it is matter of individual preference which varies from person to person.

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