Hi, Im going to take the real IELTS test next week, so could you please check and score this essay for me? Thank you very much!

QuestionsCategory: Writing Task 2Hi, Im going to take the real IELTS test next week, so could you please check and score this essay for me? Thank you very much!
mikoooo asked 2 years ago

It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that it is impossible and not beneficial for many nations to offer seats for all students to complete their higher education.In my opinion, I firmly agree with this statement because such trend will cost too much money and authorities need many people to work in other fields.
It is believed that tertiary education is so expensive ,not only to students but also to the whole country . Apparently, providing many seats in university means that the government have to build new institutions ,print more books,and pay more money to tutors which may be significantly difficult particularly in developing countries and underprivileged nations.furthermore , it is true that governments have other interests beside funding higher education.For example, what many nations did was too improve heath care system and rise the pensions of old people who can not afford living costs rather than offering many places to students without suitable learning elements such as modern computers and good tutors.
In addition , government basically need more people in vocational work.In fact,to achieve success and sustainable development ,countries not only need accountants and doctors but also they need carpenters and workers . It is irrefutable that vocational workers play an integral role in our life and they are the backbone of any economy.For instance, statistics have proven that the more workers governments have ,the less goods they will export,which means that the government will has more money to rise the living wage of its citizens .
In conclusion , there is no doubt that although offering places in colleges for further education many be beneficial to some extent ,it is understandably that authorities have other moral missions such as taking care of old people as well as improving their own economy.

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Nam Phuong answered 2 years ago

It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that it is impossible and not beneficial for many nations to offer seats for all students to complete their higher education.In my opinion, I firmly agree with this statement because such trend will cost too much money and authorities need many people to work in other fields.
It is believed that tertiary education is so expensive ,not only to students but also to the whole country . Apparently, providing many seats in university means that the government have to build new institutions ,print more books,and pay more money to tutors which may be significantly difficult particularly in developing countries and underprivileged nations.furthermore , it is true that governments have other interests beside funding higher education.For example, what many nations did was too improve heath care system and rise (raise) the pensions of (for) old people who can not afford living costs rather than offering many places to students without suitable learning elements such as modern computers and good tutors.
In addition , government basically need more people in vocational work.In fact,to achieve success and sustainable development ,countries not only need accountants and doctors but also they need carpenters and workers . It is irrefutable that vocational workers play an integral role in our life and they are the backbone of any economy.For instance, statistics have proven that the more workers governments have ,the less (fewer) goods they will export (do you mean “import”?),which means that the government will has more money to rise the living wage of its citizens . (I think that this example is not appropriate in this situation, for example, for those countries who can’t grow tropical fruits, the fact that they have more workers doesn’t mean they don’t have to import tropical fruit anymore.)
In conclusion , there is no doubt that although offering places in colleges for further education many (may) be beneficial to some extent ,it is understandably (understandable) that authorities have other moral missions such as taking care of old people as well as improving their own economy.

T.R: 6.5

  • address all parts of the task
  • example is not appropriate enough to support the idea

C.C: 7.0

  • clear progression throughout

L.R: 6.0

  • wider range and more flexible use of vocabulary will be preferred
  • spelling mistakes

G.A: 7.0

  • good use of complex structure

Overall: 6.5

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