Hi! I am going to have IELTS exam on 25th February. Could you please check my essays and give me some feedback? Thank you in advance!

QuestionsCategory: OpinionHi! I am going to have IELTS exam on 25th February. Could you please check my essays and give me some feedback? Thank you in advance!
Cristina Bocan asked 2 years ago

Task 1 – The chart below shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of two air pollutants in four big cities in 2000.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart presents information about the average minimum and maximum quantities of Sulplur Dioxide and Dinitrous Oxide eliberated in the air in four cities back in 2000. From the graph it can be obviously discerned that the largest pollutant amounts were produced by Mexico.
Mexico registered a higher N20 quantity than SO2 amount, [email protected] minimum and maximum representing roughly a half from N20 smallest and largest figures. In the case of Los Angeles, the air is mainly polluted with Dinitrous Oxide, the average quantities of Sulphur being almost inexistent. Calcutta registered similar levels of the two air toxines, SO2 representing , on average, around 50 cube metres, whilst N20 daily average is approximately just below 50 m3, Beijing figures looks more interesting. The minimum averages are extremely low compared to the maximum ones, To be more precise, SO2 figures are 25 m3 and 130 m3 and N20 lowest and highest levels are 14 and 54,respectively,
All in all, the largest figures are observed for Mexico, but the most eye-catching levels are in Beijing.
TASK 2 – Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, the society is highly developed and certain signs of evolution can be perceived in every single domain. Therefore the education system also evolved, particularly in terms of the teaching methods. The online courses represent one of the new, innovative teaching ways meant to enhance the studying. That is why I strongly consider them a positive change in tertiary education.
To begin with, the online courses sustain the students to broaden their knowledge base about the notions which have been explained by the professors. By the way of illustration, let’s consider a student who has just taught the basic notions about a specific programming language. In order to resolve an assignment perfectly they realise that deeper programming skills are required, Owing to the online programming courses provided by their university, they will foster their skills easily. Moreover, if that certain programming language appeals to them, they will be able to utilise the online course to follow their passion.
Secondly, the online courses can help the students to understand more properly the taught courses. If they pinpoint a lecture part they did not understand totally,they will be able to consult the online information about the problematic part. Thus, they will have less issues regarding studies.
Thirdly, if the universities facilitate access to such courses, not only the students will benefit, but also the professors and the tertiary education institutions themselves. The reason why this benefical situation occurs is simple to discern. The professors would confront less questions from the student side. The university itself will be generally regarded as a high quality one because of this online platform and will be swamped by students each year.
To conclude, the nascent computer-courses bring a significant number of advantages to both students and faculties. In my views, I concur that the online based learning should be adopted by an increasing number of education institutions.
 
Also can you say to me exactly how many words do I need to write at Task 1? Thank you in advance! I m looking forward for your feedback!

Hi! I am going to have IELTS exam on 25th February. Could you please check my essays and give me some feedback? Thank you in advance!
4 (80%) 1 vote

2 Answers
Rachel Evans answered 2 years ago

Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, the society is highly developed and certain signs of evolution can be perceived in every single domain. Therefore, the education system also evolved, particularly in terms of the teaching methods. The online courses represent one of the new, innovative teaching ways meant to enhance the studying. That is why I strongly consider them a positive change in tertiary education.
To begin with, the online courses sustain the students to broaden their knowledge base about the notions which have been explained by the professors. By the way of illustration, let’s consider a student who has just taught the basic notions about a specific programming language. In order to resolve an assignment perfectly they realise that deeper programming skills are required. Owing to the online programming courses provided by their university, they will foster their skills easily. Moreover, if that certain programming language appeals to them, they will be able to utilise the online course to follow their passion.
Secondly, the online courses can help the students to understand more properly the taught courses. If they pinpoint a lecture part they did not understand totally, they will be able to consult the online information about the problematic part. Thus, they will have fewer issues regarding studies.
Thirdly, if the universities facilitate access to such courses, not only the students will benefit, but also the professors and the tertiary education institutions themselves. The reason why this beneficial situation occurs is simple to discern. The professors would confront less fewer questions from the students’ side. The university itself will be generally regarded as a high quality one because of this online platform and will be swamped by students each year.
To conclude, the nascent computer-courses bring a significant number of advantages to both students and faculties. In my views, I concur that the online based learning should be adopted by an increasing number of education institutions.
Task achievement – 7.5

  • address all parts of the task

Coherence and cohesion – 7.5

  • logically arrange ideas

Lexical resource – 7.0

  • use a wide range of vocabulary
  • however, maybe overuse of article ‘the’

Grammatical range and accuracy – 7.5

  • wide range of sentence structures

Overall 7.5

Hi! I am going to have IELTS exam on 25th February. Could you please check my essays and give me some feedback? Thank you in advance!
4 (80%) 1 vote

Rachel Evans answered 2 years ago

The bar chart presents information about the average minimum and maximum quantities of Sulplur Dioxide and Dinitrous Oxide eliberated in the air in four cities back in 2000. From the graph it can be obviously discerned that the largest pollutant amounts were produced by Mexico.
Mexico registered a higher N20 quantity than SO2 amount, [email protected] minimum and maximum representing roughly a half from N20 smallest and largest figures. In the case of Los Angeles, the air is mainly polluted with Dinitrous Oxide, the average quantities of Sulphur being almost inexistent. Calcutta registered similar levels of the two air toxines, SO2 representing , on average, around 50 cube metres, whilst N20 daily average is approximately just below 50 m3, Beijing figures looks more interesting. The minimum averages are extremely low compared to the maximum ones, To be more precise, SO2 figures are 25 m3 and 130 m3 and N20 lowest and highest levels are 14 and 54,respectively,
All in all, the largest figures are observed for Mexico, but the most eye-catching levels are in Beijing.
 
In writing task 1, you don’t need to have full 3 parts, though 😀 Maybe more comparison among countries’ fig. would be better.
Overall task 1. – 6.5

Hi! I am going to have IELTS exam on 25th February. Could you please check my essays and give me some feedback? Thank you in advance!
4 (80%) 1 vote

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