hi guys your help much needed I need an urgent feedback for my following letter

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kankoon asked 5 months ago

Your cousin wants to join the same company you are going to work for soon. Write to your manager asking him for a job for him/her.
 

  • introduce yourself
  • what jobs suitable for your cousin
  • what make him/her suitable for this position

 
 
 
Dear Mr. Paul,
 
I am writing to you to enquire about openings jobs in your reputed company for my cousin.
 
I am Wafa Husam, an electrical engineer. Last month I had an interview with you and you sent me the call letter on 15th of July to join your maintenance department on 18th of August.
 
My cousin is interested to work in the software department and data back-up. He would be lucky enough if you could engage him in the industrial automation programming as he passionate about it.
 
He is the best candidate you could ever have for this position for various reasons. Firstly, he graduated from the MIT University which conducts extensive internships for its students. Secondly, he won two prizes in designing and tweaking a humanoid robot for industrial use.
 
I look forward to hearing from you a positive response.
 
 
Yours faithfully,
WafaHusam
 
 
 

hi guys your help much needed I need an urgent feedback for my following letter
5 (100%) 1 vote

1 Answers
Rachel Evans answered 5 months ago

Dear Mr. Paul,

I am writing to you to enquire about openings jobs in your reputed company for my cousin.

I am Wafa Husam, an electrical engineer. Last month I had an interview with you and you sent me the call letter on 15th of July to join your maintenance department on 18th of August.

My cousin is interested to work in working in the software department and data back-up. He would be lucky enough if you could engage him in the industrial automation programming as he is passionate about it.

He is the best candidate you could ever have for this position for various reasons. Firstly, he graduated from the MIT University which conducts extensive internships for its students. Secondly, he won two prizes in designing and tweaking a humanoid robot for industrial use.

I look forward to hearing from you a positive response.

Yours faithfully,
WafaHusam
Interested to only used with verbs of perception (see, hear, know…) – referring to things related to knowledge, senses, or experience.
TA – 7.0
CC – 7.0
LR – 7.0 
GRA – 6.5
Overall 7.0
 

hi guys your help much needed I need an urgent feedback for my following letter
5 (100%) 1 vote

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