Hello!thuy dung pham and rachel…Please check my essay and give me feedback.

QuestionsCategory: Writing Task 2Hello!thuy dung pham and rachel…Please check my essay and give me feedback.
Arora asked 5 months ago

Some countries have introduced a law to limit working hours for enployees. Why is this introduced? Do you think it is positive or negetive development? 
In the present, authorities in all around the globe introducing number of various laws in order to accelerate employment rate. However, governments of many nations have limited the work hours for every person. Some people consider it beneficial, others believe this can come with enormous detrimental consequences. In this essay, reasons of imposing this regulation as well as my perspective will be examined be me. 
Many veterns think that there could be many reasons behind this measure which is taken by government. Mainly, in order to erect unemployment. In this case, many regions were suffering with the unemployment crisis because many employees were done work without any limit. Consequently, employers had no need to hire extra workers to get work from them.
First and the foremost merit of this law is incline towards employment ratio. In fact, when number of hours have been limited by authorities, therefore there is restriction on every company that they cannot get over work from employees and they need to hire more workers. Secondly, maintain peace and satisfaction among people. It is undeniable that when every individual get job and they will become able to fulfil all their essential needs. 
Some people consider this notion is not downside free. Mainly, it would extra burden on employers to give training to all the workers.
In my perspective, it has both good and minus points. As merits outweight the demerits. I hold the belief that impose limit on hours of employment does more benefits than loss.

Hello!thuy dung pham and rachel…Please check my essay and give me feedback.
5 (100%) 1 vote

1 Answers
Thuy Dung Pham answered 4 months ago

In the present, authorities in all around the globe introducing a number of various laws in order to accelerate employment rate. However, governments of many nations have limited the working hours for people every person. Some people consider its beneficial, others believe this can come with enormous detrimental consequences. In this essay, reasons of imposing this regulation as well as my  personal perspective will be examined be me
Many veterns think that there could be many reasons behind this measure which is taken by government. Mainly, in order to erect unemployment (incomplete sentence). In this case, many regions were suffering with the unemployment crisis because many employees were done work without any limits. Consequently, employers had no need to hire extra workers to get work from them.
First and the foremost merit of this law is incline towards employment ratio. In fact, when number of hours have been limited by authorities, therefore there is restriction on every company that they cannot get over work from employees and they need to hire more workers. Secondly, maintain peace and satisfaction among people (incomplete sentence). It is undeniable that when every individual get job and they will become able to fulfil all their essential needs. 
Some people consider this notion is not downside free. Mainly, it would extra burden on employers to give training to all the workers.
In my perspective, it has both good and minus points. As merits outweight the demerits. , (comma)  I hold the belief that impose limit on hours of employment does more benefits than loss.
Task achievement: 5.0 (presents some main ideas but the development is not always clear and not sufficiently developed)
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0 (present information with some organisation but may be lack of overall progression)
Lexical Resource: 5.0 (uses only basic and limited range of vocabulary)
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 4.0 (uses only a very limited range of structures, some structures are accurate but errors predominate and punctuation is often faulty, many incomplete sentences)
Overall: 5.0 (this task needs to be improved. It is too simple to get high score)

Hello!thuy dung pham and rachel…Please check my essay and give me feedback.
5 (100%) 1 vote

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