Helloo. thuy Dung Pham and rachel Please access my essay. your remarks is very important for me.

QuestionsCategory: Writing Task 2Helloo. thuy Dung Pham and rachel Please access my essay. your remarks is very important for me.
Sahil asked 2 years ago

Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the words fuel resources. To what extent you agree or disagree.
It is irrefutable the fact that nowadays travelling by air has became comfortable, quick, cheapest than ever before. Some people think that aeroplanes bring on many critical problems, which are proved harmful for our environment so that travelling by air should be prohibited. In my perspective, restricting air travel may solve some problems but it could lead to many other issues.
At the first, when people from all around the planet worrying about excessive uses of fossil fuels and increase in the level of global warming.  It is appropriate to take against culpirts. However, discouraging uses of air travel can be proved extra burden on other means of transportation vehicles. Moreover, international tourism is backbone of world’s economy growth. At ones, air travel will be hindered, hence, it can bring more problems such as,  break down in many professions and several individual will be lived without jobs.
Air flight also enable intercultural exchanges between two nations. In fact, travel by air is the cheapest way of travelling and makes people able to travel daily, therefore it gives opportunity to many tourists to go to other countries gather different experiences about culture and life style then broder their horizons.
It is true that air travelling bring about more consumption of fuel but other vehicles also cause pollution and oil consumption. Moreover, discouraging uses of private cars and encourage people to use public transport can be appropriate solution. Therefore, imposing ban on air transport is not a valuable decision . Whereas, technology can also pay its contribution after making fuel efficient engines.
Summer up, instead of imposing ban on air travel  , authorities can motivate people for using public transport vehicles. 

Helloo. thuy Dung Pham and rachel Please access my essay. your remarks is very important for me.
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Arora replied 2 years ago

Thanks Rachel very much.

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Rachel Evans answered 2 years ago

It is irrefutable the fact that nowadays travelling by air has became comfortable, quick, cheapest cheaper than ever before. Some people think that aeroplanes bring on many critical problems, which are proved harmful for our environment so that travelling by air should be prohibited. In my perspective, restricting air travel may solve some problems but it could lead to many other issues.
At the first, when people from all around the planet worrying about excessive uses of fossil fuels and increase in the level of global warming.  (?!) It is appropriate to take against culpirts (culprits). (these 2 sentences should be just 1). However, discouraging uses of air travel can be proved extra burden on other means of transportation vehicles. Moreover, international tourism is backbone of world’s economy growth. At ones, air travel will be hindered, hence, it can bring more problems such as, break down in many professions and several individual will be lived without jobs. (no passive voice with intransitive verb)
Air flight also enables intercultural exchanges between two nations. In fact, travel by air is the cheapest way of travelling and makes people able to travel daily, therefore it gives opportunity to many tourists to go to other countries gather different experiences about culture and life style then broader their horizons.
It is true that air travelling brings about more consumption of fuel but other vehicles also cause pollution and oil consumption. Moreover, discouraging uses of private cars and encourage people to use public transport can be appropriate solution. Therefore, imposing ban on air transport is not a valuable decision. Whereas, technology can also pay its contribution after making fuel efficient engines.
(incoherent arranged ideas)
Summer To sum up, instead of imposing ban on air travel, authorities can motivate people for using to use public transport vehicles. 
TA – 5.5

  • address all parts but some may be more fully covered than the others
  • may not be sufficiently developed

CC – 5.0
LR – 5.5

  • use adequate range of vocab for the task
  • make some errors in preposition, spelling, and word form

GRA – 6.0

  • use a mix of complex and simple sentence forms

Overall – 5.5

Helloo. thuy Dung Pham and rachel Please access my essay. your remarks is very important for me.
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Arora replied 2 years ago

Thanks Rachel very much.

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