Global warming problem-solution

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Ngamelody asked 1 year ago

Global warming which results from that the earth’s temperature is rising poses a deadly threat to our planet. Humans are responsible for a variety of causes deteriorating this “ greenhouse effect”, but we still can take steps to reduce the damage we are causing to minimize the issue. This essay will discuss some of the causes and the feasible solutions that governments and individuals can work towards to tackle with global warming issue.
Unfortunately, recent scientific research has revealed that there are many reasons to explain why global temperatures keep on increasing. Firstly, automobiles nowadays develop too much in their number running on the roads. The more number of cars, trucks, etc; the more exhaust fumes and heat they emit into the atmosphere. Secondly, due to the rapid development of industrial factories, smoke and toxic gases seem to be pumped out more often than usual which leads to the atmospheric ozone layer being poisoned and depleted. Thirdly, the industry of energy production claims too many fossil fuels such as coal and natural gas being burnt. This also adds to the causes of the temperature being raised.
Serious as these causes might be, we can take various measures to lower their impact on our planet. One of the measures should be implemented is to create more public transport links. This way would help to lessen the number of cars hustling on the roads. What is more, governments should place laws and restrictions on companies and factories so as to keep them as eco-friendly as possible. Last but not least, more alternative and natural energy resources should be made use of. In this case, instead of producing heat and gases, we can harness energy from the sun, wind and water.
In brief, the long-term effects of global warming are yet unknown but they are, for sure, harmful to human-beings. Hence, all solutions suggested need to be put in place as soon as possible to save our planet.

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Ngamelody replied 1 year ago

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Thuy Dung Pham answered 1 year ago

Global warming which results from that the Earth’s temperature is rising [rising temperature] poses a deadly threat to our planet. Humans are responsible for a variety of causes deteriorating this “ greenhouse effect”, but we still can take steps to reduce the damage we are causing [have caused] to minimize the issue. This essay will (informal) -> [shall] discuss some of the causes and the (unnecessary) feasible solutions that governments and individuals can work towards to tackle with global warming issue.
Unfortunately (unnecessary) Recent scientific research has revealed that there are many (informal) [several/a number of] reasons to explain [/explaining] why global temperatures keep[s] on increasing (the underlined part could be replaced with “behind the rising trend of global temperature”) Firstly, automobiles [“vehicles” would be more commonly used] nowadays develop too much in their number running on the roads. (unnecessarily lengthy sentence) -> [The amount of vehicle is rapidly increasing nowadays]. The more number of cars, trucks, etc; the more exhaust fumes [containing greenhouse gases] and heat they emit [is emitted/released] into the atmosphere. Secondly, due to the rapid [/significant/remarkable/extensive/intensed/large-scaled] development [and expansion] of industrial factories, smoke and toxic gases seem appear to be pumped out [released] more often than usual, which leads to the atmospheric [which do serious/intensive harm to] the protective ozone layer (because this knowledge could not be generally known to be linked to ‘global warming’, you should explain a bit about it, which is to prevent the Earth from being heated up)  -> [weakening its capability of protecting the Earth from being heated] being poisoned and depleted/ Thirdly, for the past few years, the industry of energy production is mainly rely on sources that are non-renewable and environmentally harmful of energy such as fossil fuels, such as coal and natural gas being burnt. This [is] also adds to the causes [one of the widely known causes] of the temperature being raised (the underlined part could be replaced with “that accelerates the global temperature”)
Serious as these causes might be, we can take various measures actions instantly to lower the impact on our planet. One of the measures action should be implemented is to create more public transport links. This way would help to lessen the number of cars hustling on the roads. What is more, governments should place laws and restrictions on companies and factories so as to keep them as eco-friendly as possible. Last but not least, more alternative and natural/renewable energy resources should be made use of. In this case, instead of producing heat and gases, we can harness energy from the sun, wind and water.
In brief, the long-term effects of global warming are yet unknown but they are, for sure, harmful to human-beings. Hence, all solutions suggested need to be put in place as soon as possible to save our planet.
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Task achievement: 8.0 (excellent response to the topic requirement!!!)
Coherence and cohesion: 7.5 (some ideas needs to a little further explaination, yet are well-linked overall)
Lexical Range: 8.0 (excellent use of vocabs)
Grammar Accuracy: 7.5 (good use of complex structures, no mistakes with grammar)
Overall: 8.0

Global warming problem-solution
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Ngamelody replied 1 year ago

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Ngamelody replied 1 year ago

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