Could you please score and check my essay task 2

QuestionsCategory: Writing Task 2Could you please score and check my essay task 2
Samantha asked 1 year ago

Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
People have different views about the way leading to a satisfying working life. Personally, I agree that deciding on a career path early and pursuing it is a better choice to get job satisfaction than often switching jobs.
On the one hand, following a career path early can boost the likelihood of gaining a sense of fulfillment from work. Firstly, people who know what career they want to do at the beginning will have more time to prepare for it. For example, dreaming of becoming a banker, a student finds out information about job prospects, educational requirements and try to get revelant qualifacations, which makes a promising guarantee for a career success. Secondly, staying in a particular job for long period may allow someone advance to the top in their chosen field. Basing on professional experience, they efficiently handle problems at work without causing more strain and hassle.
On the other hand, the more early people choose a job to persue, the more quickly they get satified with it. By defining clearly the satisfactions from their career, they focus on improving themselves and reaching their goals. While friends of the same age deal with interviews for a new job and have trouble in adapting to a new work environment, they are managers with higher status and better salary. Therefore, instead of changing jobs more regularly, making effort to the current job will give a lot of long-term benefits.
In conclusion, some people are interested in enjoying different jobs for new experience, but I believe that choosing a job early and remaining on this path is the key to job satisfaction.

Could you please score and check my essay task 2
5 (100%) 1 vote

Samantha replied 1 year ago

Thank you so much for your help! It is really useful to me 🙂

1 Answers
Rachel Evans answered 1 year ago

Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People have different views about the way leading to a satisfying working life. Personally, I agree that deciding on a career path early and pursuing it is a better choice to get job satisfaction than often switching jobs.

On the one hand, following a career path early can boost the likelihood of gaining a sense of fulfillment from work. Firstly, people who know what career they want to do at the beginning will have more time to prepare for it. For example, dreaming of becoming a banker, a student finds out information about job prospects, educational requirements and try tries to get relevant qualifications, which makes a promising guarantee for a career success. Secondly, staying in a particular job for long period may allow someone to advance to the top in their chosen field. Basing on professional experience, they efficiently handle problems at work without causing more strain and hassle.

On the other hand, the more early earlier people choose a job to persue pursue, the more quickly they get satified satisfied with it. By defining clearly the satisfactions from their career, they focus on improving themselves and reaching their goals. While friends of the same age deal/ are dealing with interviews for a new job and have troubles in adapting to a new work environment, they are managers with higher status and better salary. Therefore, instead of changing jobs (more) regularly, making effort to the current job will give a lot of/ more long-term benefits.

In conclusion, some people are interested in enjoying different jobs for new experience, but I believe that choosing a job early and remaining on this path is the key to job satisfaction.
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Hi Samantha,

First of all, I’d like to thank you for this essay. Idk why but I think I need this at some points 🙂

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Overall  6.5 + (TA – 70 LR – 65 GRA 65 CC 70)

  • Some grammatical errors were made, so pay close attention to SV agreement and use of phrasal V/ collocations

Could you please score and check my essay task 2
5 (100%) 1 vote

Samantha replied 1 year ago

Thank you so much for your help! It is really useful to me 🙂

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