Could you please give feedback and evaluate my writing Task 2.

QuestionsCategory: ProcessCould you please give feedback and evaluate my writing Task 2.
Kübra Cgr asked 10 months ago

There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
It is true that we can be found that variety of music styles around the world recently. Music is essential part of human life and cultures for several of reasons and I will give information about that traditional music is more important than international music.
Music is accompanies us in every area of our life. As baby, our parents are song lullabies to put to sleep as a mean of music relaxes us. And as children, we are taught to sing songs by our parents, teachers and our siblings. Thanks to them, we learnt our language as simply and form of enjoyable. Later in life, people’s musical predilections change or develop and we notice that it come to see our favorite songs as vital part of our life stories. Also, music both expresses and arouses the emotions in a way that words alone cannot. In briefly, I cannot imagine life without music.
In my opinion, traditional music has precedence over international music. International modern music is generally fun and attractive so become more popular. Least generation prefer to listen this style of music. Actually, this type of music is produced to aim for commercial earning by business people. In spite of, traditional music reveals the cultural identity, history and customs of nations. Traditional styles, such as Turkish Classical Music connect us to the past and form of cultural identity with use way of nostalgic and emotional. If international music continue to become so predominant, national styles would disappear. 
In conclusion, music is essential part of human life, and I believe that traditional styles should be given more value than international styles in recently.

Could you please give feedback and evaluate my writing Task 2.
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