Could you please assess my essay? I have an exam soon.

QuestionsCategory: Writing Task 2Could you please assess my essay? I have an exam soon.
Pooja asked 2 years ago

Hardships often prepare ordinary people for an extra-ordinary destiny. Discuss
Hurdles are one of the inseparable parts of everyone’s life. No doubt, hard work is the key to success, but sometimes failure teaches mankind to augment their efforts in order to get good fortune. Thus, I believe that the obstacles one face in life definitely encourage to shape the future in good manner.
Initially, after every dusk the dawn always comes. Likewise, in life problems are always there and solutions are also within those issues. The mindset of people can turn the tables and whole circumstances. Confidence, well determination and strong will power can supersede every problem. Furthermore, when human beings tackle different difficulties on various stages, these hurdles give them a chance to learn how to get solution.
Apart from experience to deal with such things, Homo sapiens gain many other skills to struggle. Moreover, it is often said that failures are like the sapling of a plant which can take lots of time to grow but ultimately the outcome is always sweeter than it is expected. One should not give up at any cost because quitters never win and winners never quit. Troubles have no calendars; these can come on anytime at anyone.
In my opinion, being extra-ordinary from ordinary is not a herculean task for any individual. Many people are there in the world who have started their life from scratch and after confronting and handling all the setbacks they have become greatest and one of the renowned persons among the world.
In epilogue, it can be said that the outlook and perception towards life can embellish one’s life to a great extent. Nothing changes overnight; everything takes fair share of time similarly these hindrances make people more powerful and strong.

Could you please assess my essay? I have an exam soon.
5 (100%) 1 vote

1 Answers
Thuy Dung Pham answered 2 years ago

Hurdles are one of the inseparable parts of everyone’s life. No doubt, hard work is the key to success, but sometimes failure teaches mankind to augment their efforts in order to get good fortune. Thus, I believe that the obstacles one face in life definitely encourage to shape the future in good manner.
Initially, after every dusk the dawn always comes. Likewise, in life problems are always there and solutions are also within those issues. The mindset of people can turn the tables and whole circumstances. Confidence, well determination and strong will power can supersede every problem. Furthermore, when human beings tackle different difficulties on various stages, these hurdles give them a chance to learn how to get a solution.
Apart from experience to deal with such things, Homo sapiens gain many other skills to struggle. Moreover, it is often said that failures are like the sapling of a plant which can take lots of time to grow but ultimately the outcome is always sweeter than it is expected. One should not give up at any cost because quitters never win and winners never quit. Troubles have no calendars; these can come on anytime at anyone.
In my opinion, being extra-ordinary from ordinary is not a herculean task for any individual. Many people are there in the world who have started their life from scratch and after confronting and handling all the setbacks they have become greatest and one of the renowned persons among the world.
In epilogue, it can be said that the outlook and perception towards life can embellish one’s life to a great extent. Nothing changes overnight; everything takes fair share of time similarly these hindrances make people more powerful and strong.
Task achievement: 7.0 (addresses all parts of the task, presents, extends and supports main ideas)
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0 (logically organises information and ideas and there is a clear overall progression, need to have more examples)
Lexical Resource: 7.0 (uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision, manage to use less common lexical items but there are still some minor errors)
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 7.0 (uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, good control of grammar and punctuation )
Overall: 7.0 (good organisation and good ideas)

Could you please assess my essay? I have an exam soon.
5 (100%) 1 vote

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