Can you please score my IELTS essay?

QuestionsCategory: Problem-SolutionCan you please score my IELTS essay?
jasmine asked 10 months ago

Many people believe that the gap between rich and poor is widening nowadays, because in the current economic situation the rich become richer while the poor become poorer. What are the problems this situation may cause? What measures can be taken to solve them

The gap between rich and poor is a widespread issue in today’s society, especially in developing countries. This gap is a problem that should be tackled by the governments otherwise, our world will continue to be divided between the rich and the poor.

Equal rights and duties among global society are something that governments worldwide are trying to achieve. However, equality is hard to accomplish, mainly when there is so many wealth divergences mid population in the same country. In the worst case scenario, this gap could trigger violence against the rich and the governments, because if the government does not take any attitude then the poor will become poorer and will instil on them a rebellion feeling.

Furthermore, I believe that governments have a vital role to develop, especially in children education. The majority of low-income families do not have money to handle their kids education, so they do not have the same opportunities as the others children. Education is essential to achieve some status in life, and in this case to stop suffering from poverty and work at a decent and wealthy job.

To sum up, in my opinion, one of the better measures that should be implemented is allowing the same education for everyone. This measure is already being carried out in Africa, where poor kids have access to school. Another measure that should be tackle on is providing the same work opportunities and the same wages for those who execute the same tasks. No one should be benefited just for having a higher life standard.

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