Can you please check my essay ?

QuestionsCategory: Writing Task 2Can you please check my essay ?
eng_tamer6 asked 2 years ago

it is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.
to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?
 
Teaching children in early stage the difference between right and wrong is mandatory. using the punishment as effective method to enable the children to distinguish between the behaviors is a wide debate among people. I strongly think it is a successful tool if we used it considering the methods , timing and circumstances.
despite the fact that punishment will prevent human from doing certain actions or behaviors, the type of punishment has to be considered in scientific way. if the wrong punishment has been used that would lead to a negative result. it may creat a stunned person instead of teaching him. Parents can use a different type of punishment except violence or shouting, they can prevent the children from doing some activities they like for short period of time, or they can inhibit them from some toys. Although the parents and teachers can use wide range of punishment methods except beating or shouting, the timing and circumstances has to be considered.
nether less the punishment is important tool, the punishment timing and behavior circumstances Also matters. the punishment timing has to be immediately after the wrong behavior or action and not too late after. the punisher has to explain why and how the child will be punished. Also the wrong behavior circumstances  has to be considered and the punishment type and duration to be adopt accordingly.
Generally, I do Agree using the punishment as an effective tool to teach the children in early stage the differences between right and wrong if it is used as per the above criteria.
 

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eng_tamer6 replied 2 years ago

thanks a lot, it really helped me to improve my essay.

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Rachel Evans answered 2 years ago

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?
 
Teaching children in early stage the difference between right and wrong is mandatory. Using the punishment as effective method to enable the children to distinguish between the behaviors is a wide debate among people. I strongly think it is a successful tool if we used it considering the methods, timing and circumstances.
Despite the fact that punishment will prevent human from doing certain actions or behaviors, the type of punishment has to be considered in scientific way. If the wrong punishment has been used that would lead to a negative result. It may create a stunned person instead of teaching him. Parents can use a different type of punishment except violence or shouting, they can prevent the children from doing some activities they like for short period of time, or they can inhibit them from some toys. Although the parents and teachers can use wide range of punishment methods except beating or shouting, the timing and circumstances has to be considered.
Nether less the punishment is important tool, the punishment timing and behavior circumstances Also matters. The punishment timing has to be immediately after the wrong behavior or action and not too late after. The punisher has to explain why and how the child will be punished. Also the wrong behavior circumstances  has  have to be considered and the punishment type and duration to be adopt accordingly.
Generally, I do agree using the punishment as an effective tool to teach the children in early stage the differences between right and wrong if it is used as per the above criteria.
TA – 5.5

  • address all parts but not sufficiently

CC – 5.5

  • some cohesive device might be inappropriately used

LR – 6.5

  • use less common words
  • may be repetitive at places
  • misuse of article,

GRA – 6.0      

  • use mix of complex and simple structures
  • errors in punctuation 

Overall 6.0

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eng_tamer6 replied 2 years ago

thanks a lot, it really helped me to improve my essay.

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