can you please check my essay please

Questionscan you please check my essay please
aiganys asked 2 years ago

Although digital way of communication socially and professionally is supported by some,other people consider that it can be detrimental.It is obvious that people can benefit from communication through the Internet for business pursuits or social relations in their life,but there are also drawbacks to be taken into consideration.

On the one hand,one benefit from communicating using the Internet is that individuals can easily work indoor with their foreign partners from another country and can quickly send to them very important documents and so on.Moreover,they do not have to face them and it would be much cheaper for them.Secondly,communicating online is advantageous because people,especially students can keep in touch,who live far from parents,Furthermore,parents will not be worried and anxious definitely .

On the other hand, there can be one problem,when communicate through internet often and it can lead them to internet addiction.Asa result,these individuals will have acute issues with their mental health,such as being nervous and impatience.Therefore,they will hooked on the internet and will check their mobile phone or computer,even though they do not exciting message from someone.

To conclude,while people can benefit from online communication,it can also lead to very serious psychological problems.

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ashish patil answered 2 years ago

You recently attened a meeting at a hotel. when you return home you found you had left some doccument at the hotel. write to the manager
say where you think you left the paper .
explain why they are so important
tell the manager what you want him to do.

Dear sir,
I am Ashish patil, work with ITC tobbaco comapny. My had organised a meeting in your hotel on 2 december,on that day i had attended ameeting.After the completed our meeting i forgotted my project document file in your hotel i remembered that when i get home.
I am sure that i left rhis file in confarance hall .It is really important for me because its about our new upcoming project file,which i have to submmit in my next board meeting .Which is arrangend on 7th december .My problem is that i can not make another file within short span .I spend 2 month on this file to complete.
So, i request you to take prompt action to find my file . If you get it ,let it be closed then call me on …….. . Its really important so i personally i will collect it..
I am waiting to hear from you .
Yours faithfully.
Ashish patil.

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Rachel Evans answered 2 years ago

Although digital way of communication socially and professionally is supported by some, other people consider that it can be detrimental. It is obvious that people can benefit from communication through the Internet for business pursuits or social relations in their life, but there are also drawbacks to be taken into consideration.
On the one hand, one benefit from communicating using the Internet is that individuals can easily work indoor with their foreign partners from another country and can quickly send to them very important documents and so on. Moreover, they do not have to face them and it would be much cheaper for them. Secondly, communicating online is advantageous because people, especially students can keep in touch, who live far from parents. (unclear) Furthermore, parents will not be worried and anxious definitely.
On the other hand, there can be one problem, when communicate through internet often and it can lead them to internet addiction. (incomplete) As a result, these individuals will have acute issues with their mental health, such as being nervous and impatience. Therefore, they will hooked on the internet and will check their mobile phone or computer, even though they do not exciting message from someone.
To conclude, while people can benefit from online communication, it can also lead to very serious psychological problems
Under word – 215
Task achievement – 4.5

  • present some main ideas but these are limited and not sufficiently developed
  • some supporting ideas may be irrelevant
  • underword

Coherence and cohesion – 5.0

  • some sentences are not really connected

Lexical resource – 5.0

  • use limited range of vocabulary and they are repeated

Grammatical range and accuracy – 5.0

  • use limited range of structures

Overall 5.0

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Rachel Evans answered 2 years ago

Dear sir,
I am Ashish patil, work with ITC tobbaco comapny. My had (?!) organised a meeting in your hotel on the 2nd of December, on that day i I had attended a meeting. After the completed (?!) our meeting i forgotted I left my project document file in your hotel i I remembered that when i get home.
I am sure that i I left rhis this file in confarance conference hall. It is really important for me because its about our new upcoming project file, which I have to submmit submit in my next board meeting .Which which is arrangend on the 7th of December. My problem is that i can not I cannot make another file within short span. I spend (tense) 2 month on this file to complete.
So, i request you to take prompt action to find my file. If you get it, let it be closed then call me on …….. . Its really important so i will personally i will collect it.
I am waiting to hear from you.
Yours faithfully.
Ashish patil.
Task achievement – 5.0

  • present the purpose for the letter
  • tone is variable

Coherence and cohesion – 4.5

  • present ideas with some organisation

Lexical resource – 4.0

  • make noticeable errors in spelling, word order, word use

Grammatical range and accuracy – 4.0

  • use limited range of structure
  • errors dominate

Overall – 4.0

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