I have exam after several days, please check my essay(task2) thank you in advance..

QuestionsCategory: Advantage/DisadvantageI have exam after several days, please check my essay(task2) thank you in advance..
livermore asked 2 months ago

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular.
Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages.
Several years ago, users utelised for mainly to keep in touch from internet, but current period most people use not only for communication, namely another good factor that these days everybody can buy kind of vital things on the internet. Such as tickets for transportation and e-books also garments, all of them are available in online shops, therefore this method very comfortable for majority consumers but as everybody has own taste, some people prefer do shopping in usual shops. Purpose of the essay to define negative and positive sides of this issue.
There is not doubt that many people very busy with their jobs, so they do not want to spend more time for do shopping, since they accustomed to save time, so most consumers buy products through internet. There are mainly 3 comforts. Firstly, internet shops have good delivery services for each person. If people buy something on the internet shops, they do not bring to products, because their special workers deliver their goods. Secondly, you just sit and write to search section of the internet shops, as a result you find anything what you want. For instance, there are clothes, books, hi-tech gadgets, so you have a big choice for shopping. Last convenience is good costs. All consumers have a chance to compare products and prices can look at all this information on a website. Another importantly thing is type of payment available in internet shops. Such as cash, deposit, webmoney you can pay any time, although if you want at night or midnight.
On the other hand, internet shops have a minor disadvantages. Some online shop`s security system very straightforward to damage, therefore hackers may be able to copy your credit card details, in consequence, they steal your webmoney. In particular, recently hackers cheated a lot of consumers who bought items from corporation of Alibaba and they stole totally 10.800.000$. Also people often buy thing which they do not want. Why this situation always happen with them, cause consumers can not examine what they are buy until after they have bought it.
To sum up, as for as I concerned that consumers must buy things more carefully on the internet and also they should find reliable source in web shops.
 
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livermore replied 2 months ago

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Rachel answered 2 months ago

Several years ago, users utelised for mainly to keep in touch from internet, but current period most people use not only for communication, namely another good factor that these days everybody can buy kind of vital things on the internet. Such as tickets for transportation and e-books, also garments, all of them are available in online shops, therefore this method very comfortable (lack of linking verb) for majority consumers but as everybody has own taste, some people prefer doing shopping in usual shops. Purpose of the this essay is to define negative and positive sides of this issue.
There is not doubts that many people are very busy with their jobs, so they do not want to spend more time for do (on) doing shopping, since they accustomed to save time, so most consumers buy products through internet. There are mainly 3 comforts (actually there’re 4 mentioned in this paragraph). Firstly, internet shops have good delivery services for each person. If people buy something on the internet shops, they do not bring to products, because their special workers deliver their goods. Secondly, you just sit and write to search section of the internet shops, as a result you find anything what you want. For instance, there are clothes, books, hi-tech gadgets, so you have a big choice for shopping. Last convenience is good costs. All consumers have a chance to compare products and prices can look at all this information on a website. Another importantly thing is type of payment available in internet shops. Such as cash, deposit, web-money you can pay any time, although if you want at night or midnight.
On the other hand, internet shops have a minor disadvantages. Some online shops’ security system very straightforward (lack of linking verb) to damage, therefore hackers may be able to copy your credit card details, in consequence, they steal your web-money. In particular, recently hackers cheated a lot of consumers who bought items from corporation of Alibaba and they stole totally $10.800.000$. Also people often buy thing which they do not want. Why this situation always happen with them, cause consumers can not examine what they are buy until after they have bought it.
To sum up, as for as I concerned that consumers must buy things more carefully on the internet and also they should find reliable source in web shops.
Task achievement – 6.0

  • address all part of the task
  • present main ideas

Coherence and Cohesion – 5.5

  • arrange information coherently. there’s overall progression

Lexical resource – 6.0

  • use a limited range of vocabulary

Grammatical range and accuracy – 5.0

  • make frequent grammatical errors and punctuation may be faulty – errors may cause some difficulty for the reader
  • attempt to use complex sentences but these tend to be less accurate than simple sentences.

Overall – 5.0

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