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Nazim Totti asked 2 weeks ago

The highlighted line graph gives information on reaching of foreign visitors in millions over the 15-year period. What stands out from the graph is that there is an increase for each country and the most noticeable one is for France.
 
The amount of tourists’ arrival in France was 30 million in 1995 then, it soared till 2000 and continued going up slightly and reached approximately 65 million, meanwhile, the number of foreigners visited Malaysia grew gradually for ten years, thereafter it increased more sharply than before until 2010.
 
USA received 70 million tourists at the beginning, it rose gently till 2005 and reached a peak of its index which was equal to 90 million. Then it showed inconsiderable decline and in 2010 the number of tourists travelled to France and USA was the same. Both Egypt and Brazil were visited by nearly 10 million voyagers. However, Brazil was a little bit more popular, Egypt presented a significant increase roughly by 5 million.
 
All in all, United Stated of America and France recieved the the biggest number of tourists between 1995 and 2010, by contrast Brazil and Egypt were less attractive than other ones.

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